Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add one or two supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends, especially when I'm in a good mood. However, I often prefer listening rather than talking because it helps me understand them better.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

例: We usually talk about our day and share plans for the future. Sometimes, we also discuss other friends who aren't present, but mostly we focus on our own experiences.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use correct expressions. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide reasons.

例: As an introvert, I prefer chatting one-on-one with friends because I feel more comfortable. In contrast, I tend to be quiet and reserved in groups.

提案: Avoid filler words and hesitations. Structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for coherence.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication when discussing important matters because it is more effective. However, as an introvert, I often use social media to stay in touch without feeling overwhelmed.

提案: Work on grammar and clarity. Provide a clear answer with reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I sometimes argue with my friends because we all have strong opinions. However, we try to communicate openly to understand each other's viewpoints.

× Are we usually talk about our day and sometimes gossip about another friends who is not there at the moment.

✓ We usually talk about our day and sometimes gossip about other friends who are not there at the moment.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Are we' instead of 'We' to start the sentence, which is a pronoun misuse. Also, 'another friends' is incorrect because 'another' is singular and 'friends' is plural; it should be 'other friends'. Additionally, 'who is' should be 'who are' to agree with the plural noun 'friends'. The corrected sentence uses proper pronouns and subject-verb agreement.

× Otherwise we chat about life and how it's going and about the plan that we have got for the.

✓ Otherwise, we chat about life, how it's going, and about the plans that we have got for the future.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'for the' which is incomplete. Also, 'the plan' should be plural 'the plans' to match the context. Adding 'future' completes the thought. The sentence also benefits from commas for clarity.

× I prefer meeting my friends in a person's one by one rather than staying at a group.

✓ I prefer meeting my friends one by one rather than staying in a group.

The phrase 'in a person's one by one' is incorrect; 'one by one' should stand alone without 'in a person's'. Also, 'staying at a group' should be 'staying in a group' because 'in' is the correct preposition for groups or enclosed spaces.

× Whenever I'm in a group, I am the most quiet persons.

✓ Whenever I'm in a group, I am the quietest person.

The phrase 'the most quiet persons' is incorrect because 'persons' is plural while the subject 'I' is singular. The superlative form 'quietest' should be used with the singular noun 'person' to match the subject.

× Sometimes I like to uh, communicate face to face in persons, umm, if I have any important umm, things to discuss, uh, all the time.

✓ Sometimes I like to communicate face to face in person if I have any important things to discuss.

The phrase 'communicate face to face in persons' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'communicate face to face in person'. Also, 'all the time' at the end is unnecessary and confusing in this context, so it is removed for clarity.

× Ah, most of the time, because the friend that I have are so much opinionated and if we have any thoughts, we try to communicate and put on our thoughts on it.

✓ Ah, most of the time, because the friends that I have are very opinionated, and if we have any thoughts, we try to communicate and share them.

The phrase 'the friend that I have are' is incorrect because 'friend' is singular and 'are' is plural. It should be 'friends that I have are' to match plural subject and verb. Also, 'so much opinionated' is incorrect; 'very opinionated' is the correct adjective usage. 'Put on our thoughts on it' is awkward; 'share them' is clearer and more natural.