Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, instead of 'being a friendly nature is very interesting and fun', say 'I enjoy being friendly because it is interesting and fun'. Also, use past tense correctly and avoid repeating words like 'and and'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends because it is both interesting and fun. Usually, we go outside together and have casual conversations about various topics.

提案: Improve sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, instead of 'most often, most of the time', just say 'most often'. Also, avoid unnecessary prepositions like 'discuss about'.

例: I discuss many topics with my friends, but most often we talk about football and sometimes about gaming.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and connected. Avoid short fragmented sentences like 'Most of the time.' Instead, combine ideas and use linking words. Also, clarify your preference clearly.

例: Basically, there are four of us friends, including me. Most of the time, I prefer chatting with all of them because it is more enjoyable than talking to just one person.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use correct prepositions and sentence structure. Avoid repetition like 'with the with friends'. Also, explain why you prefer face-to-face communication using linking words.

例: Although social media is popular nowadays, I prefer to chat with my friends face-to-face because it allows more natural and free conversations.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'the view of sea'. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Explain reasons clearly and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Sometimes I argue with my friends about football and gaming because everyone has their own perspective, which can lead to disagreements.

× Usually I went outside with my friends and and gossiped together.

✓ Usually I go outside with my friends and gossip together.

The sentence is describing a habitual action, so the present tense 'go' and 'gossip' should be used instead of the past tense 'went' and 'gossiped'. Using past participle here is incorrect for habitual actions.

× There is a lot of topics I discuss with my friends, but most often, most of the time we discuss about the football and sometimes gaming.

✓ There are a lot of topics I discuss with my friends, but most often, most of the time we discuss football and sometimes gaming.

'Topics' is plural, so 'are' should be used instead of 'is'. Also, 'discuss' is a transitive verb and does not require the preposition 'about'.

× There is a lot of topics I discuss with my friends, but most often, most of the time we discuss about the football and sometimes gaming.

✓ There are a lot of topics I discuss with my friends, but most often, most of the time we discuss football and sometimes gaming.

The verb 'discuss' should not be followed by the preposition 'about'. It directly takes the object. Also, 'the football' is incorrect unless referring to a specific football; here, 'football' without 'the' is appropriate.

× Basically, we are four friends, including me. Most of the time. I love to chat with all of my friends and it's quite enjoyable rather than the single person.

✓ Basically, we are four friends, including me. Most of the time, I love to chat with all of my friends and it's quite enjoyable rather than with a single person.

The phrase 'rather than the single person' is incorrect; it should be 'rather than with a single person' to correctly compare chatting with a group versus one person. Also, 'Most of the time.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected properly.

× In the era of social media, I prefer chat with the with friends outside and via face to face. It includes more gossip and more freely.

✓ In the era of social media, I prefer to chat with friends outside and face to face. It includes more gossip and is more free.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb ('to chat'). The phrase 'with the with friends' is redundant and incorrect; 'with friends' suffices. 'Via face to face' is incorrect; 'face to face' is an adverbial phrase and does not need 'via'. 'More freely' should be 'more free' to describe the manner of communication.

× Sometimes I argue with my friends about the football and the gaming 'cause everyone has their own pers perspective and the view of sea. So sometimes we argue, I argue, I argue with them.

✓ Sometimes I argue with my friends about football and gaming because everyone has their own personal perspective and point of view. So sometimes we argue; I argue with them.

'The football' and 'the gaming' are incorrect; 'football' and 'gaming' should be used without 'the' when speaking generally. 'Cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because'. 'Pers perspective' is a typo and should be 'personal perspective'. 'The view of sea' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'point of view'. The repetition 'I argue, I argue' is redundant and should be simplified.