Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I sometimes chat with friends on social media, but I find it unsafe because personal information can leak. Therefore, I prefer to call them to share important information directly.

提案: Focus on using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words like 'but' to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

例: In the past, I usually chatted with friends about actresses, Korean TV series, and music we liked. However, now I have less time because of work, so I just make short calls to have brief chats.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and correct grammar mistakes for better understanding.

例: I prefer chatting with only one friend because I value quality over quantity. I have one great friend whom I trust completely, and I know she would never gossip about me.

提案: Make your answer more fluent by reducing hesitation and using linking words. Also, use correct expressions and avoid repetition for clarity.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can trust people more when I see them in real life. Social media can be misleading since some people fake their pictures.

提案: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use simple and correct sentences with linking words to explain your answer logically.

例: Not really, but sometimes I argue with friends about small issues, like when I feel they care more about others than me.

× actually sometimes I'm like chatting as friend on the social media

✓ actually sometimes I like chatting as a friend on social media

The phrase 'I'm like chatting' is incorrect; 'like' should not be used with 'I'm' here. The correct form is 'I like chatting'. Also, 'as friend' should be 'as a friend' to include the article 'a'. 'On the social media' should be 'on social media' because 'social media' is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× I just try to, uh, take a call to tell them about the, uh, important information

✓ I just try to, uh, make a call to tell them about the, uh, important information

The verb 'take a call' is used when receiving a call, but here the student means to initiate a call, so 'make a call' is correct.

× I usually should chat with friends in the past

✓ I usually chatted with friends in the past

The modal verb 'should' is incorrectly used here. To talk about past habitual actions, simple past tense 'chatted' is appropriate. 'Usually' with 'should' is not correct in this context.

× just like to about the actress, the Korean TV series and about the music we like

✓ just like to talk about the actress, the Korean TV series, and the music we like

The phrase 'like to about' is incorrect; 'talk about' is the correct verb phrase. Also, 'about' is repeated unnecessarily.

× I don't have enough of time

✓ I don't have enough time

The phrase 'enough of time' is incorrect; 'enough' is directly followed by the noun without 'of' when used with uncountable nouns like 'time'.

× I just call them a short call with them to chat, small chat

✓ I just call them for a short call to chat, a small chat

The phrase 'call them a short call with them' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'call them for a short call'. Also, 'small chat' should be preceded by an article 'a'.

× with only one friends

✓ with only one friend

'One' is singular, so the noun following it should be singular 'friend', not plural 'friends'.

× I have a only one great friends in my life

✓ I have only one great friend in my life

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'only one'. Also, 'friends' should be singular 'friend' because 'one' indicates singular.

× I can trust her because I know her she wants spilled the tea behind me

✓ I can trust her because I know she won't spill the tea behind my back

The phrase 'she wants spilled the tea' is incorrect. It should be 'she won't spill the tea'. Also, 'behind me' is better expressed as 'behind my back'.

× I prefer to communicate face to face more than umm their social media

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face more than via social media

The preposition 'their' is incorrect here; 'via' is the correct preposition to indicate the medium of communication.

× because I think I can trust people when I see them in the real reality life

✓ because I think I can trust people when I see them in real life

The phrase 'in the real reality life' is redundant and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'in real life'.

× More umm more than umm they face on social media because some people can fake on the picture

✓ More than on social media because some people can fake pictures

The phrase 'they face on social media' is incorrect; it should be 'on social media'. Also, 'fake on the picture' is incorrect; 'fake pictures' is correct.

× sometimes I'll argue with them about the small little small stories topic about such as are have a have a about the small thinking over thinking about

✓ sometimes I'll argue with them about small topics, such as overthinking

The original sentence is confusing and contains redundancy. 'Small little small stories topic' is incorrect; 'small topics' is better. 'Such as are have a have a about the small thinking over thinking about' is unclear; 'such as overthinking' is a clearer expression.

× They just love other people more than me

✓ They just love other people more than they love me

The comparison 'more than me' is ambiguous; it should be clarified as 'more than they love me' to show the comparison clearly.