Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Instead of "relax my stress," say "relieve my stress" or "help me relax." Also, try to avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me relieve stress and unwind after a busy day.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid filler words like "MMM" and "uh." Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. For example, mention specific hobbies or beauty topics you discuss.

例: We usually talk about our hobbies, such as watching movies or playing sports. We also discuss beauty topics like nail art and makeup trends that interest us.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words. Use linking words to explain your preference. Also, correct grammar mistakes like "only to only one fans" should be "only with one friend."

例: I usually prefer chatting with just one friend because group conversations can be noisy and less meaningful, while one-on-one chats allow for deeper and more focused discussions.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. For example, say "I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see facial expressions and respond immediately, whereas social media can feel impersonal."

例: I prefer to communicate face-to-face because it lets me see facial expressions and respond instantly, which makes conversations more genuine compared to social media.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear at the end. Avoid filler words and finish your thoughts. Use linking words to explain the nature of your arguments clearly.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends, usually about travel plans, like which restaurant to choose or where to have fun. However, we avoid serious conflicts to maintain our friendship.

× Yes, I like chatting with friends because that can help me relax my stress.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with friends because it can help me relax and reduce my stress.

The modal verb 'can' is used correctly here, but the sentence is awkward and unclear. 'That' is vague; replacing it with 'it' clarifies the subject. Also, 'relax my stress' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'relax and reduce my stress.' This improves clarity and correctness.

× But I, we are always discussing like hobby or the, uh, the stars and the thing we are concerned about.

✓ But we are always discussing hobbies, the stars, and things we are concerned about.

The phrase 'discussing like hobby' is incorrect; 'like' is unnecessary here. Also, 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to match the context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Also we tried a lot of the beauty like the, uh, nail or the makeup.

✓ Also, we try a lot of beauty things like nails and makeup.

The phrase 'tried a lot of the beauty' is incorrect; 'try a lot of beauty things' is more appropriate. 'Nail' should be plural 'nails' to match 'makeup.' The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and pluralization.

× Hmm, usually I like to chat only to only one fans because I think a group of people is very umm is very noisy and you only can chat with, uh, the very no meaningless topic, but with one friend you can.

✓ Hmm, usually I like to chat with only one friend because I think a group of people is very noisy and you can only chat about very meaningless topics, but with one friend you can have meaningful conversations.

The phrase 'chat only to only one fans' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'chat with only one friend.' 'Fans' is incorrect here; 'friend' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, including correcting 'very no meaningless topic' to 'very meaningless topics.'

× Umm I like to communicate face to face because I think you have to listen to the thoughts and look the face.

✓ Umm, I like to communicate face to face because I think you have to listen to the thoughts and look at the face.

The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to observing something. Therefore, 'look the face' should be 'look at the face.' This correction improves grammatical accuracy.

× You can reaction for your thoughts but in the social media you just too unknown.

✓ You can react to your thoughts, but on social media, you are just too unknown.

The word 'reaction' is a noun; the verb form 'react' is needed here. Also, the preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'react to' is correct. 'In the social media' should be 'on social media.' The phrase 'you just too unknown' is ungrammatical; 'you are just too unknown' is correct.

× Yes, I do have arguments with my friend, but they're usually like travel matters that for example, uh, which is which restaurant we to go to and where to have fun.

✓ Yes, I do have arguments with my friend, but they're usually about travel matters, for example, which restaurant we should go to and where to have fun.

The modal verb 'should' is needed to express suggestion or choice in 'which restaurant we to go to.' The phrase is corrected to 'which restaurant we should go to.' Also, 'like travel matters that for example' is awkward; 'about travel matters, for example,' is clearer.