Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and vocabulary. For example, avoid phrases like 'Oh I enjoy when I chatting with friends, it's something' which are unclear and unnatural.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my close friends, especially one named Sebnar. We often discuss various topics and share our opinions, which makes our conversations interesting and meaningful.

提案: Focus on providing a clear and grammatically correct answer. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the topics you discuss. Avoid vague phrases like 'others people' and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Usually, my friends and I chat about current news and gossip about people we know. For instance, I often talk with my close friend about university life and what has happened to our classmates recently.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference logically. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'it will be crowded and no one's interested'.

例: I prefer chatting with just one friend because group conversations can be noisy and confusing. When it's just two people, it's easier to understand each other and have a meaningful conversation.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and natural by removing filler words and improving grammar. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific details.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows us to see facial expressions and better understand each other's feelings, which is often difficult through social media.

提案: Use correct grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and explain your answer with specific details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'share about between each other'.

例: I don't argue with my friends very often because although we have different opinions, we respect each other's views and discuss them calmly.

× Oh I enjoy when I chatting with friends, it's something.

✓ Oh I enjoy when I am chatting with friends, it's something.

The verb 'chatting' needs to be in the present continuous form with the auxiliary verb 'am' to be grammatically correct after 'when I'. The correct form is 'when I am chatting'. This is because 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund phrase indicating an ongoing action.

× We always discuss about different topic and give me her own opinions about specific things and me as well.

✓ We always discuss different topics and she gives me her own opinions about specific things and I do the same as well.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'; it is directly followed by the object. Also, 'topic' should be plural 'topics' to match the context. Additionally, 'give me her own opinions' is missing the subject 'she' and should be in present tense 'gives'. The phrase 'and me as well' is unclear and corrected to 'and I do the same as well' for clarity.

× We always discuss about different topic and give me her own opinions about specific things and me as well.

✓ We always discuss different topics and she gives me her own opinions about specific things and I do the same as well.

The noun 'topic' should be plural 'topics' because it refers to multiple subjects. Using the singular form here is incorrect when talking about various topics.

× So usually when I talk with my friends, we are gossiping and talking about others people and the news what happen,

✓ So usually when I talk with my friends, we gossip and talk about other people and the news about what happened,

The phrase 'others people' is incorrect; it should be 'other people'. Also, 'the news what happen' is ungrammatical; it should be 'the news about what happened' to correctly link the news to the event.

× For example, I'm talking with my close friend about the university and the people that our classmates what happened to them?

✓ For example, I talked with my close friend about the university and what happened to our classmates.

The sentence mixes present continuous 'I'm talking' with a past event. It should be in past tense 'I talked' to match the context. Also, the phrase 'the people that our classmates what happened to them?' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'what happened to our classmates' for clarity and correctness.

× Because if we talk, uh, with each other, if you have a group at this for the same time, it will be crowded and no one's interested, each understanding each other, it will be misunderstandable.

✓ Because if we talk with each other in a group at the same time, it will be crowded and no one will be interested or understand each other; it will lead to misunderstandings.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues including awkward phrasing and unclear meaning. It is corrected for clarity, proper conjunctions, and correct word forms like 'misunderstandable' changed to 'misunderstandings'.

× So for this reason, if we are two people only you.

✓ So for this reason, it is better if there are only two people.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It is corrected to a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× I prefer to talk with people face to face, uh, because if we talk through the social media, maybe we cannot umm, explain our express expression of face and uh, maybe their feelings not go through mobile.

✓ I prefer to talk with people face to face because if we talk through social media, maybe we cannot express our facial expressions, and maybe their feelings do not come through on mobile.

The phrase 'talk through the social media' is better as 'talk through social media' without 'the'. 'Explain our express expression of face' is incorrect and corrected to 'express our facial expressions'. Also, 'their feelings not go through mobile' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'their feelings do not come through on mobile'.

× maybe we cannot umm, explain our express expression of face and uh, maybe their feelings not go through mobile.

✓ maybe we cannot express our facial expressions, and maybe their feelings do not come through on mobile.

The modal verb 'cannot' is correctly used, but the phrase following it is incorrect. 'Explain our express expression of face' is ungrammatical; it should be 'express our facial expressions' to convey the intended meaning.

× Not too much because my idea is usually different from my friends so we are not argue with each others too many times, but each of us have different opinions and we share about between each other, so yeah.

✓ Not too much because my ideas are usually different from my friends', so we do not argue with each other too many times, but each of us has different opinions and we share them with each other, so yeah.

The pronoun 'each others' is incorrect; it should be 'each other'. Also, 'my idea is' should be plural 'my ideas are' to match the context. 'We are not argue' is incorrect; it should be 'we do not argue'. The phrase 'share about between each other' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'share them with each other'.