Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and expresses your feelings well, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your answer more concise by combining ideas and using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me feel connected and supported, and I find our conversations enjoyable and meaningful.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and lacks clarity at the end. Try to finish your sentences fully and use linking words to organize your ideas clearly.

例: We usually talk about our daily lives and personal experiences. Moreover, we share our feelings and support each other when someone is upset or facing difficulties.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but the last part could be expressed more naturally. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer chatting with just one friend because I enjoy the intimacy we share, and I feel more comfortable keeping my private life confidential rather than sharing it with many people.

提案: Your answer has good points but contains some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions, and link your ideas logically.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can observe body language and emotions directly, which makes me feel more connected than chatting through social media on phones.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Use linking words to organize your ideas and express your thoughts more clearly and concisely.

例: I usually avoid arguments because I value my friendships. However, if my friends are mistaken and insist on their views, I might argue, but I always try to resolve conflicts peacefully.

× Personally, I love chatting with my friends because it makes me feel loved and admired by them and also they're very fun to talk to and it's the best way to be connected to them.

✓ Personally, I love chatting with my friends because it makes me feel loved and admired by them, and also they are very fun to talk to, and it's the best way to stay connected to them.

The phrase 'it's the best way to be connected to them' is awkward; 'to stay connected' is more natural in this context. Also, contractions like 'they're' should be expanded for clarity in formal speech. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Normally we would chat about our daily lives and the things we are experiencing and we would always talk about our feelings, like when someone is hurt we would support them and give our.

✓ Normally, we chat about our daily lives and the things we are experiencing, and we always talk about our feelings. For example, when someone is hurt, we support them and give our help.

The original sentence is incomplete and run-on. 'Give our' is incomplete; it needs an object like 'help'. Also, 'would' is unnecessary here; simple present tense is better for habitual actions. Adding punctuation and completing the thought improves clarity.

× I prefer chatting with only one friend because I love the intimacy that we are sharing and also I don't want my secrets or my private life to be known by a lot of people and it will be better.

✓ I prefer chatting with only one friend because I love the intimacy that we share, and also I don't want my secrets or my private life to be known by many people; it is better that way.

The phrase 'we are sharing' is better as 'we share' for a general statement. 'A lot of people' is informal; 'many people' is more appropriate. The last part 'and it will be better' is vague; rephrasing to 'it is better that way' clarifies meaning.

× I think I prefer communicating in real time because I can feel the tension and body languages and also it's make me feel better than talking in social media to our phones.

✓ I think I prefer communicating in real time because I can feel the tension and body language, and also it makes me feel better than talking through social media on our phones.

'Body languages' should be singular 'body language' as it is an uncountable noun. 'It's make me' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes me' for subject-verb agreement. 'Talking in social media to our phones' is awkward; 'talking through social media on our phones' is clearer.

× Normally I don't argue with my friends because I don't like arguments and also I value our friendships. But in rare occasions when they are not right and they try and defend themselves I will argue with them but I prefer to resolve it.

✓ Normally, I don't argue with my friends because I don't like arguments and I value our friendships. But on rare occasions, when they are not right and try to defend themselves, I may argue with them, although I prefer to resolve it peacefully.

'In rare occasions' should be 'on rare occasions'. 'Try and defend' is informal; 'try to defend' is correct. 'I will argue' is better as 'I may argue' to express possibility. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.