Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь избегать лишних пауз и слов-паразитов, таких как "uh" и "um". Также улучшите структуру ответа, сделав его более связным и лаконичным, избегая повторов, например, "to to" и "town city".

例: Yes, I really enjoy spending time chatting with my friends on social media. Since I recently moved to another city, social media helps me stay connected with them easily.

提案: Используйте более точные и разнообразные слова, избегайте общих фраз, таких как "everything I think". Также улучшите связность, используя связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями.

例: Usually, we share updates about our lives, interesting work experiences, and beauty tips. For example, I recently bought a new lipstick and showed it to my friends, which sparked a fun conversation.

提案: Улучшите грамматику и уберите лишние слова, например, "the my 2 close friends". Также добавьте связующие слова для более плавного и логичного ответа.

例: I usually chat in a group with my two close friends because it's convenient; this way, I don't have to repeat the same story to each person separately.

提案: Сократите повторения и улучшите структуру предложения. Используйте связующие слова для более плавного изложения мыслей и избегайте излишних слов, таких как "and others".

例: Although social media allows video calls, I believe face-to-face communication is essential because it enables us to fully express emotions and better understand each other.

提案: Избегайте незавершённых предложений и улучшите связность, используя подходящие связующие слова. Также исправьте грамматические ошибки, например, "a different points" должно быть "different points".

例: We don't argue, but we often have different points of view on the same issue. However, we express our opinions openly, listen to each other, and try to understand different perspectives.

× It is uh, especially actual option for me since uh, I have moved to to another town city and uh, having social media allows me to stay connected with my friends.

✓ It is especially a good option for me since I have moved to another town, and having social media allows me to stay connected with my friends.

The phrase 'especially actual option' is incorrect; 'actual' is not appropriate here. The correct phrase is 'especially a good option'. Also, 'to to' is a repetition error and should be 'to'. Additionally, 'town city' is redundant; choose either 'town' or 'city'. The preposition 'to' is correctly used with 'moved to'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper preposition use.

× Like not so long ago I have bought new lipstick and I have showed it to my friends.

✓ Like not so long ago I bought new lipstick and showed it to my friends.

In English, the simple past tense is used for actions completed in the past at a specific time. The present perfect 'have bought' and 'have showed' are less appropriate here. Also, the past participle of 'show' is 'shown', not 'showed'. However, in simple past, 'showed' is correct. To keep consistency, use simple past: 'bought' and 'showed'.

× I have a group chat with the my 2 close friends and usually we chat in this group.

✓ I have a group chat with my 2 close friends and usually we chat in this group.

The phrase 'the my' is incorrect; only one article or possessive pronoun should be used. Here, 'my' is correct without 'the'. Also, numbers like '2' should be written as 'two' in formal writing, but since it's a transcript, '2' is acceptable.

× Social media will never replace face to face communication even you can see the person or through video options and others.

✓ Social media will never replace face-to-face communication, even if you can see the person through video options and others.

The phrase 'face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adjective. The sentence lacks 'if' after 'even' to introduce the conditional clause. Also, 'or through video options and others' is unclear; 'through video options and others' is better. Prepositions and conjunctions are corrected for clarity.

× I do believe that face to face communication is crucial and vital and only it allows to express your emotions fully and understand another person better.

✓ I do believe that face-to-face communication is crucial and vital, and only it allows you to express your emotions fully and understand another person better.

The phrase 'allows to express' is missing the object pronoun 'you'. The correct form is 'allows you to express'. Also, 'face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face'. Pronoun usage is corrected for grammatical accuracy.

× I don't think that we argue, but very often we have a different points of view on the same issue and we can express it openly and.

✓ I don't think that we argue, but very often we have different points of view on the same issue and we can express them openly and

The phrase 'a different points of view' is incorrect because 'points' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. It should be 'different points of view'. Also, 'express it' should be 'express them' to agree with the plural 'points'. Singular and plural agreement is corrected.