Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends because we share recent experiences and discuss different perspectives on various moments.

提案: Jawaban sudah cukup baik, namun bisa ditingkatkan dengan menambahkan variasi kosakata dan menghindari pengulangan kata yang sama.

例: We usually talk about our recent lives, including work, family issues, and mutual friends. For instance, we share experiences and offer advice when someone encounters a problem, which makes our conversations meaningful and helps strengthen our friendship.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas serta alami. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.

例: Actually, I am someone who values personal friendships, so I prefer chatting with a trusted friend, like an old friend, and we often talk in detail about many things.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari pengulangan kata. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih lancar dan alami.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can feel their energy, see their emotions, and hear their tone of voice, which makes the interaction more intimate.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

例: I think it depends on the topic of the argument. For example, if my friends make a mistake or have a wrong opinion, I usually disagree and explain my point of view. However, if they are right, I am happy to agree and support their ideas.

× Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends such as we share our life recently and tell each other. Perspective about one moments.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends, such as sharing our recent lives and telling each other our perspectives about moments.

The original sentence has unclear and fragmented structure. 'Such as' should introduce examples, so it needs to be followed by gerunds or noun phrases. Also, 'Perspective about one moments' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it should be 'our perspectives about moments.' Improving sentence structure clarifies meaning and grammatical correctness.

× Actually, I'm a typical person who maintain a personal friendship, so I prefer to share only with my trusted friend, such as my old friend and I talk a lot about every detail.

✓ Actually, I'm a typical person who maintains personal friendships, so I prefer to share only with my trusted friends, such as my old friends, and I talk a lot about every detail.

The verb 'maintain' should be 'maintains' to agree with the singular subject 'person' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'friendship' is uncountable, but here plural 'friendships' fits better. 'Friend' should be plural to match 'friends' in context. The sentence also needs commas to separate clauses properly.

× I prefer the face to face communication because I can feel their energy.

✓ I prefer face-to-face communication because I can feel their energy.

The phrase 'face-to-face communication' is a general concept and does not require the definite article 'the.' Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× Also I can see their emotion, the their tone of voice and so it feels more intimate.

✓ Also, I can see their emotions, their tone of voice, and so it feels more intimate.

The phrase 'the their tone of voice' is incorrect; 'the' is unnecessary before 'their.' Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the plural possessive pronoun 'their.' Proper punctuation and conjunction use improve clarity.

× However, if they are right, I am happy to agree on them support their ideas.

✓ However, if they are right, I am happy to agree with them and support their ideas.

The phrase 'agree on them support their ideas' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'agree with them' and 'support their ideas.' The conjunction 'and' is needed to connect the two actions. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.