Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid hesitation and grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement. Use more natural phrasing and reduce redundancy. For example, say "I prefer chatting with knowledgeable people, like teachers or professors, rather than those who aren't very intelligent."

例: I prefer chatting with knowledgeable people, like teachers or professors, rather than those who aren't very intelligent.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For instance, "I usually chat with my friends about current social issues, recent technological developments, or historical figures."

例: I usually chat with my friends about current social issues, recent technological developments, or historical figures.

提案: Reduce hesitation and improve fluency. Use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. For example, "I prefer talking one-on-one because it allows for more private and in-depth conversations, which often lead to thought-provoking insights."

例: I prefer talking one-on-one because it allows for more private and in-depth conversations, which often lead to thought-provoking insights.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I prefer face-to-face communication because it is more effective and personal than social media, especially for one-on-one conversations."

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it is more effective and personal than social media, especially for one-on-one conversations.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons and examples. For instance, "Yes, I do argue with friends sometimes because it helps us understand different perspectives better. For example, discussing human rights often leads to deeper insights."

例: Yes, I do argue with friends sometimes because it helps us understand different perspectives better. For example, discussing human rights often leads to deeper insights.

× Well, it depends on whether the people is informative or knowledgeable.

✓ Well, it depends on whether the people are informative or knowledgeable.

The noun 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I don't like to chat with some people who is, uh, is not, uh, very, very smart or intelligent.

✓ I don't like to chat with some people who are not very, very smart or intelligent.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people', which is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× I just like to talk with some teachers or some professors, uh, to.

✓ I just like to talk with some teachers or some professors, too.

The word 'to' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'too' meaning 'also'.

× Most of the time I love to have a chatting with my friends about the newspapers or some historical events.

✓ Most of the time I love to have a chat with my friends about newspapers or some historical events.

The phrase 'a chatting' is incorrect; 'chatting' is a gerund and does not take an article. The correct noun form is 'a chat'. Also, 'the newspapers' is incorrect when referring generally; 'newspapers' without 'the' is appropriate.

× For example, we will talk about some social issues recently like the some some events in the technology aspects or just talk about some historical characters.

✓ For example, we will talk about some social issues recently, like some events in the technological aspects, or just talk about some historical characters.

The phrase 'the some some events' is incorrect; 'some' alone is sufficient. Also, 'technology aspects' should be 'technological aspects' to use the correct adjective form.

× During this conversation, we can talk about, uh, something more deeply and, uh, I can get some insights of provoking thoughts, uh, effective.

✓ During this conversation, we can talk about something more deeply, and I can get some insights that provoke effective thoughts.

The phrase 'insights of provoking thoughts' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'insights that provoke effective thoughts' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Uh, I would like to talk about, uh, something with my friends face to face rather than via social media.

✓ Uh, I would like to talk about something with my friends face-to-face rather than via social media.

The phrase 'face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adverbial phrase.

× Additionally, uh, it's uh, it's more effective to transfer the information.

✓ Additionally, it's more effective to convey the information.

The verb 'transfer' is less appropriate in this context; 'convey' is more suitable when talking about communicating information.

× I think that is very common for people to have an argument, even with friends.

✓ I think it is very common for people to have arguments, even with friends.

The phrase 'an argument' is singular, but 'people' is plural, so 'arguments' plural is more appropriate to match the plural subject.

× And I think it's useful to help the people to get the deeper understanding of something.

✓ And I think it's useful to help people get a deeper understanding of something.

The phrase 'the people' is incorrect here; 'people' without 'the' is more natural. Also, 'the deeper understanding' should be 'a deeper understanding' to indicate one of many possible understandings.