Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та илүү дэлгэрэнгүй, тайлбарласан хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, яагаад найзуудтайгаа ярилцах дургүйгээ тайлбарлах нь таны хариултыг илүү байгалийн, үр дүнтэй болгоно.

例: No, I don't like chatting with friends very much because I am a bit shy and prefer spending time alone or doing other activities.

提案: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, тодорхой бус байна. Илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой өгүүлбэр ашиглан сэдвээ тайлбарлах хэрэгтэй.

例: We usually chat about our school projects, especially the art board we are working on and what tasks we need to complete.

提案: Хариулт тань ойлгомжтой боловч илүү дэлгэрэнгүй, жишээтэй болгох хэрэгтэй. Холбогч үг ашиглан хариултыг өргөжүүлээрэй.

例: I prefer to chat with a small group of two or three friends because it is more lively and everyone can share their ideas.

提案: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, логик холбоо муутай байна. Илүү тодорхой, холбоотой өгүүлбэр ашиглан тайлбарлах хэрэгтэй.

例: I prefer to communicate via social media because I am shy and feel more comfortable expressing myself online.

提案: Хариулт тань ойлгомжтой боловч илүү дэлгэрэнгүй, жишээтэй болгох хэрэгтэй. Учир шалтгаан болон жишээ оруулбал илүү үр дүнтэй болно.

例: No, I never argue with my friends because I respect their opinions and try to keep our friendship peaceful.

× Which art board, what we are doing?

✓ Which art board are we working on?

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks proper sentence structure. It is a fragment and does not form a complete question. The correction forms a proper question with subject-verb agreement and correct word order.

× I prefer to chat with a group of people, two or three people.

✓ I prefer to chat with a group of two or three people.

The phrase 'with a group of people, two or three people' is redundant and awkward. The correction removes redundancy and places the quantifier correctly after 'group of' to specify the number of people.

× Why is social media? Because. I'm shy.

✓ Why social media? Because I'm shy.

The original sentence 'Why is social media?' is ungrammatical and awkward. The correction removes the unnecessary verb 'is' to form a more natural question. Also, the period after 'Because' is removed to connect the explanation properly.