Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and natural by avoiding fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct awkward expressions like 'change my energies then more than usual' and 'give to myself'.

例: No, I don't really enjoy chatting with friends because I'm quite an introverted person and prefer spending time alone. Moreover, socialising often drains my energy more than usual. To be honest, I sometimes struggle to find topics to talk about during conversations, so I tend to keep to myself.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar to make your answer clearer and more natural. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, provide more specific details to enrich your answer.

例: My friends and I both love pets, especially cats and dogs, and we are raising some ourselves. Therefore, most of the time, we chat about our pets, sharing photos and stories about their daily lives.

提案: Correct vocabulary errors such as 'check' instead of 'chat' and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, clarify your reasons with more specific details.

例: I prefer to chat with only one friend because, as I mentioned before, I'm quite an introverted person. Chatting with just one close friend makes me feel more relaxed and comfortable.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, explain why face-to-face conversations can be awkward with specific reasons.

例: I prefer to use social media because it's very convenient and saves a lot of time compared to meeting up in person. Additionally, face-to-face conversations can sometimes be awkward because you have to maintain eye contact and think quickly on your feet.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific strategies you use to avoid arguments.

例: No, I don't argue with my friends because I dislike conflicts. Instead, I stay calm and try to see things from different perspectives to understand them better, which helps me avoid disagreements.

× I find that socialising can sometimes change my energies then more than usual.

✓ I find that socialising can sometimes drain my energy more than usual.

The phrase 'change my energies then more than usual' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely that socialising reduces or drains energy. Also, 'energies' is plural, but 'energy' is usually uncountable in this context. The verb 'change' is not appropriate here; 'drain' or 'use up' fits better.

× To be honest. I often struggle with finding the topics to say during conversations so I tend to give to myself.

✓ To be honest, I often struggle to find topics to talk about during conversations, so I tend to keep to myself.

The original sentence is fragmented ('To be honest.'), and 'finding the topics to say' is awkward. The phrase 'give to myself' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'keep to myself' meaning to be reserved. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But me and my friends are both love pets like cats or dogs and we we also raising cats or dogs.

✓ My friends and I both love pets like cats and dogs, and we are also raising cats and dogs.

The subject pronoun 'me' is incorrect; it should be 'I' when used as a subject. The phrase 'are both love pets' is ungrammatical; it should be 'both love pets'. The verb 'raising' needs an auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense. Also, 'or' should be 'and' to indicate both animals.

× So most of the time we are talking about our pets and sharing the photos and their daily lives.

✓ So most of the time, we talk about our pets and share photos of their daily lives.

The present continuous 'are talking' and 'sharing' is acceptable but the simple present 'talk' and 'share' is more appropriate for habitual actions. Also, 'sharing the photos and their daily lives' is awkward; it should be 'share photos of their daily lives'.

× I prefer check with only one friend.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one friend.

The verb 'check' is incorrect in this context; the intended verb is likely 'chat'. Also, 'prefer' should be followed by 'to' plus the base verb: 'prefer to chat'.

× Like I mentioned before, I'm quite an intuitive person and only check with one friend can make me feel more relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Like I mentioned before, I'm quite an introverted person and chatting with only one friend makes me feel more relaxed and comfortable.

The word 'intuitive' is incorrect; the intended adjective is 'introverted'. The phrase 'only check with one friend can make me feel' is ungrammatical; it should be 'chatting with only one friend makes me feel'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'makes' for singular subject.

× And normally I only check with my uh, close friend.

✓ And normally, I only chat with my close friend.

Again, 'check' is incorrect; it should be 'chat'. The sentence also benefits from a comma after 'normally' for clarity.

× I prefer to use social media because it's very convenient and it saves a lot of time to meet up and we still can share stuff.

✓ I prefer to use social media because it's very convenient, saves a lot of time compared to meeting up, and we can still share stuff.

The original sentence has awkward conjunction use and redundancy. 'It saves a lot of time to meet up' is incorrect; it should be 'saves a lot of time compared to meeting up'. Also, 'we still can share stuff' is better as 'we can still share stuff'.

× And when it comes to face to face conversations sometimes will be awkward since you have to keep.

✓ And when it comes to face-to-face conversations, sometimes they can be awkward because you have to keep up appearances.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject for 'will be awkward'. Adding 'they can be awkward' clarifies the subject. Also, 'face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face'. The phrase 'you have to keep' is incomplete; adding 'up appearances' or similar completes the thought.

× No I don't. I'm not I'm I don't like to argue with my friends, I don't like any argument and I don't want to fight with them.

✓ No, I don't. I'm not; I don't like to argue with my friends, I don't like any arguments, and I don't want to fight with them.

The phrase 'I'm not I'm' is confusing and likely a speech hesitation; it should be clarified or removed. Also, 'any argument' should be plural 'any arguments' for natural usage. Commas and semicolons improve sentence clarity.

× I always keep calm down and think from different way to understand my friends so I will try to avoid this happening.

✓ I always keep calm and think from different perspectives to understand my friends, so I try to avoid this happening.

The phrase 'keep calm down' is incorrect; it should be 'keep calm'. 'Think from different way' is ungrammatical; it should be 'think from different perspectives' or 'think differently'. The phrase 'so I will try to avoid this happening' is better as 'so I try to avoid this happening' for present habitual action.