Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and avoid redundancy. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends, especially after work because it helps me relax. Moreover, staying connected regularly is important as it keeps me updated about their well-being and strengthens our bond.

提案: Avoid filler words and clarify your points. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the topics you discuss.

例: We usually chat about work and college events. Additionally, since many of my friends are fitness enthusiasts, we often discuss our daily workouts and meal plans to stay motivated.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons.

例: I prefer chatting in groups because when there are several members, we exchange diverse ideas. This variety of perspectives makes the discussion more engaging and positive.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence construction and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically and be specific about the benefits of face-to-face communication.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows for more intimacy and helps me understand emotions through facial expressions. This is especially important during emotional conversations.

提案: Improve fluency by reducing pauses and use linking words to connect ideas clearly. Also, be more specific about how you resolve arguments.

例: Yes, we sometimes argue during calls because we have different perspectives shaped by our diverse backgrounds. However, we always try to understand each other and eventually reach a mutual agreement.

× It energizes me and gives me a, a vibrant feel uh, that all my friends are doing well uh,

✓ It energizes me and gives me a vibrant feeling that all my friends are doing well.

The word 'feel' is a noun here but 'vibrant' is an adjective that should modify a noun. The correct noun form is 'feeling' instead of 'feel'. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' should be removed for clarity.

× Moreover, I also think uh connected, being connected with friends regularly is very important.

✓ Moreover, I also think that being connected with friends regularly is very important.

The sentence lacks the conjunction 'that' to introduce the clause 'being connected with friends regularly is very important'. Also, 'connected' alone is misplaced; the phrase should be 'being connected'.

× We usually chat about, uh, things that are happening at work and colleges, uh, with friends.

✓ We usually chat about things that are happening at work and college with friends.

The word 'colleges' is plural but contextually it should be singular 'college' to match 'work' as a singular noun. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' should be removed.

× So we usually start, uh, our day talking about, uh, what are the workouts we are doing today and what are we going to eat that tea?

✓ So we usually start our day talking about what workouts we are doing today and what we are going to eat or drink with tea.

The phrase 'what are the workouts we are doing today' is incorrectly structured; it should be 'what workouts we are doing today'. Also, 'eat that tea' is unclear; it should be 'eat or drink with tea'. Fillers like 'uh' should be removed.

× I love chatting with group of people because, uh, when there are more than, uh, two or four members in the group, uh, while talking, I feel the ideas and the informations that we get are vast.

✓ I love chatting with a group of people because when there are more than two or four members in the group, I feel the ideas and the information that we get are vast.

The phrase 'with group of people' lacks the article 'a'. Also, 'informations' is incorrect as 'information' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Fillers like 'uh' should be removed.

× We'll get different ideas from people according to their point of views and that makes a discussion very positive.

✓ We'll get different ideas from people according to their points of view and that makes the discussion very positive.

The phrase 'point of views' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'points of view'. Also, 'a discussion' should be 'the discussion' to refer to the specific discussion mentioned.

× I love to communicate face to face rather than social media because face to face conversation gives more intimacy and makes the relationship stronger and let me know what they are doing, what they are expressing with their face.

✓ I love to communicate face to face rather than via social media because face-to-face conversation gives more intimacy, makes the relationship stronger, and lets me know what they are doing and expressing with their face.

The phrase 'rather than social media' should be 'rather than via social media' to indicate the medium. 'Face to face' as an adjective should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face'. Also, 'let me know' should be 'lets me know' to agree with the singular subject 'conversation'. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions.

× I also think that is very much important while we talk to each other about a very emotional.

✓ I also think that it is very important when we talk to each other about very emotional topics.

The phrase 'very much important' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'very important'. Also, 'about a very emotional' is incomplete; it should be 'about very emotional topics'. The preposition 'while' is better replaced with 'when' for clarity.

× Yes, we do argue in calls about different topics.

✓ Yes, we do argue on calls about different topics.

The correct preposition to use with 'calls' in this context is 'on' rather than 'in'. 'Argue on calls' is the standard expression.

× We are all different people who grew up in different phases of life and that makes us think differently which results in arguments.

✓ We are all different people who grew up in different phases of life, and that makes us think differently, which results in arguments.

The sentence is grammatically correct but adding commas improves clarity. No singular/plural error here, so no correction needed.

× But even though we have different point of views, we at point come to a conclusion where we have to agree with each other.

✓ But even though we have different points of view, we at some point come to a conclusion where we have to agree with each other.

The phrase 'point of views' should be 'points of view'. Also, 'we at point come' is incorrect; it should be 'we at some point come'.