Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me relax and share my thoughts. For example, after a long day at school, we often talk about our experiences, which improves my mood and strengthens our relationships.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, tránh lỗi như "were" thay vì "and", "shares" thay vì "share". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ liên kết mạch lạc.

例: I usually chat with my friends about our daily lives, lifestyle, school, and hobbies. For example, we often share updates about interesting events or fun experiences we have had recently. We also talk about common interests like movies or sports to stay connected and enjoy our conversations.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến số ít và số nhiều (ví dụ: "introvert person" thay vì "introvert persons"), và ngữ pháp như "more comfortable" nên là "more comfortably" hoặc "feel more comfortable". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để ý nghĩa chính xác hơn.

例: I am an introvert person, so I prefer chatting with only one friend because it allows for deeper and more meaningful conversations. When talking one-on-one, it's easier to focus on the other person's feelings and thoughts, which helps build a stronger connection. For example, I often feel more comfortable sharing personal experiences.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "uh" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "is allowed" thành "allows". Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc, có liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lặp từ.

例: From my perspective, I prefer to communicate face-to-face with my friends because I can observe their body language, facial expressions, and emotions more clearly. However, social media is also convenient because it allows us to stay connected anytime when we are busy and cannot meet in person.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp thì quá khứ và hiện tại, ví dụ "came down" nên là "calm down", và "help her" nên là "help us". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để ý nghĩa chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends, especially when we have different perspectives on the same situation. However, after the argument, we usually calm down and talk things through, which helps us understand each other better and strengthens our friendship.

× To be honest, I'm really into chewing the fat with my friends because it helped me let it help let my hair down and share my thoughts.

✓ To be honest, I'm really into chewing the fat with my friends because it helps me let my hair down and share my thoughts.

The verb 'helped' is in the past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense 'helps' to match 'I'm really into'. Also, 'help let' is redundant; only one 'let' is needed. Use present tense to express habitual action.

× For example, after a long day at school, uh talking with friends about our experience and always live.

✓ For example, after a long day at school, talking with friends about our experiences always lifts my mood.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. It also uses 'live' incorrectly. The correction provides a complete sentence with proper verb and meaning.

× My mood is also strengthen our relationships by allowing us to understand each other better.

✓ My mood is also strengthened, and it helps our relationships by allowing us to understand each other better.

'Strengthen' should be in past participle 'strengthened' to agree with 'is'. Also, the sentence needs conjunction and subject clarification for clarity.

× Uh, well, I usually chat with my friends about our dailies, lifestyle, school, were our hobbies.

✓ Uh, well, I usually chat with my friends about our daily lives, lifestyle, school, and our hobbies.

'Dailies' is incorrect; the correct plural form is 'daily lives'. Also, 'were' is incorrect and should be 'and' to connect the list properly.

× For example, we often shares updates about interesting events or fun experience we have had recently.

✓ For example, we often share updates about interesting events or fun experiences we have had recently.

The subject 'we' requires the base form 'share' not 'shares'. Also, 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'events'.

× Talking about a common interest like movies or sports also happens.

✓ Talking about common interests like movies or sports also happens.

'Interest' should be plural 'interests' to match the plural examples 'movies' and 'sports'.

× Stay connected and enjoy our conversations.

✓ This helps us stay connected and enjoy our conversations.

The original is a fragment without a subject or verb. Adding 'This helps us' completes the sentence.

× Umm, I am introvert persons, so I prefer chatting with only one friend because it allows for a deeper and more meaningful conversations.

✓ Umm, I am an introvert person, so I prefer chatting with only one friend because it allows for deeper and more meaningful conversations.

'Persons' is incorrect here; 'person' is singular. Also, 'a deeper and more meaningful conversations' mixes singular and plural; 'conversations' should be plural without 'a'.

× When talking once one-on-one, it's easier to focus on the other person feelings and thoughts which help build a stronger connection.

✓ When talking one-on-one, it's easier to focus on the other person's feelings and thoughts, which help build a stronger connection.

'Once one-on-one' is incorrect; should be 'one-on-one'. Also, possessive form 'person's' is needed before 'feelings'.

× For example, I often find that I can share personal experience more comfortable.

✓ For example, I often find that I can share personal experiences more comfortably.

'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the context. Also, 'comfortable' should be the adverb 'comfortably' to modify 'share'.

× From perspective, I prefer to communicate face to face with my friends because I can observe their body language, facial expression, and emotions more clearly.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer to communicate face to face with my friends because I can observe their body language, facial expressions, and emotions more clearly.

Missing possessive pronoun 'my' after 'From'. Also, 'facial expression' should be plural 'facial expressions'.

× However, uh, it's undeniable that uh, social media is also convenient because we, when we are busy and cannot meet in person, is allowed to stay connected any time.

✓ However, it's undeniable that social media is also convenient because when we are busy and cannot meet in person, it allows us to stay connected anytime.

The sentence has awkward structure and incorrect pronoun usage. 'Is allowed' is incorrect; 'it allows us' is correct. 'Any time' should be 'anytime' as an adverb.

× Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends, especially when we have a different perspective on the same situation.

✓ Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends, especially when we have different perspectives on the same situation.

'A different perspective' should be plural 'different perspectives' to match plural subject 'we'.

× However, after the argument, we usually came down and talk things through which help her understand each other better and strengthen our bonds and friendship.

✓ However, after the argument, we usually calm down and talk things through, which helps us understand each other better and strengthens our bonds and friendship.

'Came down' is incorrect past tense; should be 'calm down' present tense to match 'usually'. 'Help her' is incorrect pronoun; should be 'helps us'. Verbs 'help' and 'strengthen' need 's' for third person singular.