Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, instead of 'build a new community on online platform', say 'build new communities on online platforms'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends online because it helps me build new communities on various platforms, and I can easily share my problems with them.

提案: Focus on grammar and clarity. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, avoid repetition and be specific about the types of challenges or support.

例: I usually chat with my friends about my feelings and daily challenges, so I can get their support and find solutions to my problems.

提案: Improve sentence structure and word choice. Use linking words like 'because' properly and avoid awkward phrases like 'connect it with him'. Be clear and concise.

例: I prefer chatting with one friend rather than a group because I feel more comfortable and can connect better to find solutions together.

提案: Work on grammar and clarity. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas. Also, say 'face-to-face communication' and 'social media' correctly.

例: I enjoy both communication methods; however, I prefer face-to-face communication when possible because I can make eye contact, otherwise I use social media.

提案: Avoid informal phrases like 'Let's see' and improve sentence flow. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons. Also, say 'enrich my thinking' more naturally.

例: To be honest, I often argue with my friends about various topics because these discussions help me learn new information and broaden my perspective.

× it helps me build a new community on online platform

✓ it helps me build a new community on an online platform

The phrase 'on online platform' is missing the article 'an' before 'online platform'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Here, 'platform' is singular and countable, so 'an' is needed before 'online'.

× I easily share my obstacles to my friends

✓ I easily share my obstacles with my friends

The verb 'share' is typically followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the person with whom something is shared. Using 'to' is incorrect in this context.

× face challenging in my daily life

✓ face challenges in my daily life

The word 'challenging' is an adjective or present participle, but here a noun 'challenges' is needed to correctly express the difficulties faced. 'Face' is followed by a noun, so 'challenges' is appropriate.

× find solution of my difficulties from them

✓ find solutions to my difficulties from them

The correct collocation is 'find solutions to difficulties'. Also, 'solution' should be plural 'solutions' to match the plural 'difficulties'.

× They they always support me in various way

✓ They always support me in various ways

The phrase 'various way' is incorrect because 'various' is used with plural nouns. Therefore, 'ways' should be plural. Also, the repeated 'They' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× Actually I prefer to chat with one friend except a group of people

✓ Actually I prefer to chat with one friend instead of a group of people

The preposition 'except' is incorrect here. The correct phrase to express preference is 'instead of' when contrasting two options.

× I can easily connect it with him and get a solution from them

✓ I can easily connect with him and get a solution from him

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'them' is plural but refers to 'him' which is singular, so 'him' should be used consistently.

× I communicate with face to face

✓ I communicate face to face

The phrase 'face to face' is an adverbial phrase and does not require the preposition 'with'. Using 'with' here is incorrect.

× I communicate with a social media

✓ I communicate via social media

The phrase 'communicate with a social media' is incorrect because 'social media' is uncountable and does not take an article. The correct preposition is 'via' to indicate the medium of communication.