Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy and filler words like 'uh'. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, directly state your preference and reasons without hesitation or repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends on my mobile phone because we live far apart. It helps me stay connected and share what happened during the day, especially in my free time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid repeating the same idea and be specific about the topics you discuss.

例: I usually chat about my daily activities and any new experiences I have. Sometimes, I also ask my friends for advice on different matters.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some awkward phrasing and filler words. Try to express your preference clearly and use linking words to contrast your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer chatting with only one friend because I feel more comfortable and can communicate easily. In contrast, group chats often feel less convenient for me.

提案: Your answer has unclear expressions and filler words. Try to explain your preference clearly and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to balance your ideas.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more comfortable and genuine. However, social media is useful when meeting in person is not possible.

提案: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain how discussions can sometimes become arguments but remain friendly.

例: I don't usually argue with my friends. Sometimes, when we have different opinions on a topic, we discuss it calmly without any serious conflict.

× Guess I like chatting with my friends on a mobile phone to, uh, share the things to which I did not get because of the distance we have.

✓ I guess I like chatting with my friends on a mobile phone to share things that I did not get because of the distance between us.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and has awkward phrasing. Adding 'I' as the subject and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For that reason.

✓ For that reason,

'For that reason' is a phrase that should be connected to the following sentence or clause; as a standalone sentence, it is incomplete.

× Also, I love to do chatting when it's, uh, my free time and deliver all the the things that happened to me with my friends.

✓ Also, I love chatting when I have free time and sharing all the things that happened to me with my friends.

The phrase 'love to do chatting' is incorrect; 'love chatting' is more natural. 'When it's my free time' should be 'when I have free time'. 'Deliver all the things' is better expressed as 'sharing all the things'.

× I usually do chat about the day past what I did and while during do doing some things, what new things happen and it's all about the day passed and how I spend it, what would happen and just want to take some advice from there.

✓ I usually chat about the past day, what I did, what new things happened while doing some things, how I spent the day, what might happen, and I just want to get some advice from there.

The original sentence is confusing and contains redundant and incorrect phrases like 'do chat', 'day past', 'while during do doing'. Simplifying and correcting verb tenses improves clarity.

× Actually, I really don't like to chat in a group of people where I don't find any kind of a comfortable and convenient at the same time.

✓ Actually, I really don't like chatting in a group of people because I don't find it comfortable or convenient at the same time.

The phrase 'any kind of a comfortable and convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'comfortable or convenient'. Also, 'to chat in a group' is better as 'chatting in a group'.

× Whereas I'm able, uh, to chat with the only one friend, which is uh, where I'm comfortable and easy to collaborate with a single person more than with a group.

✓ Whereas I am able to chat with only one friend, where I feel comfortable and find it easier to communicate with a single person than with a group.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect use of 'the only one friend'. Correcting to 'only one friend' and improving sentence flow enhances clarity.

× I prefer to communicate face to face rather than in a social media because I find that comfortable and showing the experience and the feel that really comes, uh, while chatting face to face.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face rather than via social media because I find it comfortable and it shows the experience and feelings that really come while chatting face to face.

'In a social media' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'via social media'. Also, 'showing the experience and the feel' is better expressed as 'it shows the experience and feelings'.

× But at the same time, when it's all about, you know, chatting may not, uh, feel goes.

✓ But at the same time, when it's all about chatting, it may not feel the same.

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. Simplifying to 'it may not feel the same' clarifies the intended meaning.

× Actually it's not about an argument, but while doing some decision in the same topic at that time, maybe some different perspective and different ideas put on on the same topic at that time.

✓ Actually, it's not about an argument, but when making decisions on the same topic, sometimes different perspectives and ideas are presented.

The original sentence is awkward and repetitive. Correcting 'doing some decision' to 'making decisions' and removing redundancy improves clarity.

× The discussion may goes on argument, but not uh, wild. It's as a simple and uh.

✓ The discussion may turn into an argument, but not a wild one. It's usually simple.

'May goes on argument' is incorrect; it should be 'may turn into an argument'. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished for clarity.