Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve samimi, ancak bazı cümleler tekrarlayıcı ve uzun. Daha etkili olmak için, gereksiz tekrarları azaltmalı ve cümlelerinizi daha kısa ve net yapmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleler arasında daha iyi bağlantı kurabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because I value our time together. We talk about various topics, and although I usually listen more, I join the conversation when I have something to add.

提案: Cevabınızda konuları sıralamışsınız ancak tekrar eden kelimeler var ve cümle yapısı basit. Daha spesifik örnekler vererek ve bağlaçlar kullanarak cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

例: We usually chat about recent events at school, our family lives, relationships, and plans for the future. For example, last week we discussed our upcoming exams and career goals.

提案: Cevabınız açık ancak bazı ifadeler doğal değil ve tekrarlar mevcut. Daha akıcı ve doğal ifadeler kullanmalı, gereksiz kelimeleri çıkarmalısınız.

例: I don't have a strong preference because I enjoy talking with both individuals and groups. However, I find group discussions more engaging since we can share different opinions on various topics.

提案: Cevabınız net ve mantıklı, ancak 'umm' gibi dolgu kelimelerinden kaçınmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi bağlaçlarla daha akıcı hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to see the other person's reactions, which is important for understanding each other better.

提案: Cevabınız anlaşılır ancak tekrar eden kelimeler ve ifadeler var. Daha çeşitli kelimeler kullanarak ve cümleleri daha kısa yaparak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: We rarely argue, but sometimes disagreements happen due to different opinions. When that occurs, we try to resolve the conflicts calmly.

× I love spending some great time with them.

✓ I love spending some great time together with them.

The phrase 'spending some great time with them' is understandable but 'spending some great time together with them' is more natural and idiomatic in English when emphasizing shared time.

× We usually talk about what happened in school or about our families or about our relationships, our school, our future, that kind of topics.

✓ We usually talk about what happened in school, our families, our relationships, our school, our future, that kind of topics.

Repeating 'about' before each noun is unnecessary and awkward. It's better to use 'talk about' once and list the topics separated by commas.

× I love, you know, discussing about some topic and it's good to discuss about some topic with a group of people.

✓ I love, you know, discussing some topics and it's good to discuss some topics with a group of people.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'. Saying 'discuss about' is incorrect; it should be 'discuss some topic'.

× It really doesn't matter to me 'cause I will speak anything with any people.

✓ It really doesn't matter to me because I will speak about anything with anyone.

The phrase 'speak anything with any people' is incorrect. 'Speak about anything' and 'anyone' are the correct pronouns to use here.

× In my opinion talking face to face is much better than calling or messaging since you can see the persons umm reaction to what you're saying and I think it's important.

✓ In my opinion, talking face to face is much better than calling or messaging since you can see the person's reaction to what you're saying and I think it's important.

The word 'persons' should be singular possessive 'person's' because it refers to the reaction of one person. Also, a comma is needed after 'In my opinion' for clarity.