Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장이 다소 중복되고 길어 이해하기 어려울 수 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

例: It depends on my mood. When I feel depressed, I usually avoid talking, but when I'm energetic, I enjoy chatting with my friends a lot.

提案: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 추가 설명을 할 때는 'because'나 'so' 같은 연결어를 사용해 문장을 더 매끄럽게 만드세요.

例: We usually talk about our daily life because most of my friends are from my hometown and college, so we often share fun and silly memories from the past.

提案: 답변에 문법적 오류와 중복이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 다듬고, 연결어를 적절히 사용해 보세요.

例: I prefer chatting with one person because when I talk to many people, I get distracted and can't focus, so one-on-one conversations are better for me.

提案: 문장에 중복과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 시제와 단어 선택에 주의하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 표현하세요.

例: Since I'm quite old-fashioned, I prefer face-to-face communication because it gives me a stronger sense of friendship and helps build better relationships.

提案: 문법 오류와 중복이 많아 이해하기 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 올바르게 사용하여 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

例: Yes, sometimes we debate when we have different opinions, but we always find common ground in the end.

× Whenever I feel depressed, I usually don't speak with others, but I feel when I feel energetic and active, I spend a lot of time talking with my friends.

✓ Whenever I feel depressed, I usually don't speak with others, but when I feel energetic and active, I spend a lot of time talking with my friends.

The phrase 'but I feel when I feel' is redundant and incorrect. The correct structure is 'but when I feel' to properly connect the clauses and maintain present tense consistency.

× We usually talk about our daily life and sometimes, since most of my friends are from my hometown and college, we often talk about our past, which is really fun and silly.

✓ We usually talk about our daily lives and sometimes, since most of my friends are from my hometown and college, we often talk about our past, which is really fun and silly.

The phrase 'daily life' should be pluralized to 'daily lives' because it refers to the daily experiences of multiple people. This is a common prepositional and noun agreement issue.

× I prefer to chat with only one person because sometimes I chat with a lot of people it I feel distracted and I cannot concentrate on that person.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one person because sometimes when I chat with a lot of people, I feel distracted and cannot concentrate on that person.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunction and punctuation, causing confusion. Adding 'when' and a comma clarifies the sentence structure and meaning.

× I think I'm since I'm quite old fashioned, I prefer to communicate with people in person rather than communicating with social media because it gave me a sense of of strong friendship and also I can build strong relationship with others.

✓ I think since I'm quite old fashioned, I prefer to communicate with people in person rather than via social media because it gives me a sense of strong friendship and also I can build strong relationships with others.

The phrase 'communicating with social media' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'via social media'. Also, 'gave' should be 'gives' to maintain present tense, and 'relationship' should be pluralized to 'relationships' to match the context.

× Yeah, sometimes when we have different opinions about something, we often debate or arguing about this matter and but however we find always find our common ground.

✓ Yeah, sometimes when we have different opinions about something, we often debate or argue about this matter, but however we always find our common ground.

The phrase 'debate or arguing' mixes verb forms incorrectly. It should be 'debate or argue' to maintain parallel structure. Also, 'and but however' is redundant; 'but however' or just 'however' is sufficient. The word order 'we find always find' is incorrect; it should be 'we always find'.