Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb forms and improve sentence structure for clarity. Avoid redundancy and use simpler, more natural expressions. For example, say 'I love chatting with my friends in my spare time because it helps me relax and refresh.'

例: Yes, I love chatting with my friends in my spare time because it helps me relax and refresh. I usually share my daily experiences with them, which makes our conversations enjoyable.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence construction and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I usually share what is happening in my life and sometimes send funny videos, which makes our chats enjoyable. Also, I share my problems and they help me.'

例: I usually talk about what is happening in my life. Sometimes, I share funny videos, which makes our conversations enjoyable. Also, I discuss my problems with them, and they try to help.

提案: Improve sentence flow and use more natural expressions. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas. For example, say 'I prefer both. When the story is funny, I share it in a group so everyone can enjoy. However, for personal topics, I prefer chatting with one friend for privacy.'

例: I prefer both ways. When I have a funny story, I share it in a group so everyone can enjoy. However, if the topic is personal, I prefer to chat with just one friend to keep privacy.

提案: Use complete sentences and avoid fragments. Connect ideas with linking words like 'but' and 'so'. For example, say 'I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels natural and enjoyable. However, when schedules don't allow, I use social media to stay in touch.'

例: I prefer to communicate face-to-face because it feels natural and enjoyable. But when we cannot meet due to busy schedules, I use social media to talk with my friends.

提案: Work on grammar and sentence clarity. Use simpler sentences and correct verb forms. For example, say 'Sometimes I argue with my friends when I believe I am right. However, I try to avoid arguments because I don't want to lose my friends.'

例: Sometimes I argue with my friends when I think I am right. However, I try to avoid arguments because I don't want to lose my friends.

× I love to chatting with my friends in my spare time because it gives me quite relaxed and fresh more full moment.

✓ I love chatting with my friends in my spare time because it gives me quite a relaxed and more fulfilling moment.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'chatting' not the infinitive 'to chatting'. Also, 'more full' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'more fulfilling'. Additionally, 'quite relaxed' should be preceded by an article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Furthermore, I share of my the whole of day experiences with them and it gives me quite enjoyful moment with them.

✓ Furthermore, I share my whole day's experiences with them and it gives me quite an enjoyable moment with them.

The phrase 'share of my the whole of day experiences' is incorrect; it should be 'share my whole day's experiences'. Also, 'enjoyful' is not commonly used; 'enjoyable' is the correct adjective. The article 'an' is needed before 'enjoyable moment'.

× Usually I share all of the things is what is going or what I do in my life share with them.

✓ Usually, I share everything that is going on or what I do in my life with them.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundancy. 'All of the things is what is going or what I do in my life share with them' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses proper relative clause and word order.

× Sometimes I share some funny reels in in a chat.

✓ Sometimes I share some funny reels in a chat.

There is a repeated preposition 'in in'. Only one 'in' is needed.

× Also sometimes I share some problems with them and she they addresses.

✓ Also, sometimes I share some problems with them and they address them.

The pronouns 'she they' are incorrect and confusing. It should be 'they' to refer to friends, and the verb 'address' should be followed by the object 'them' referring to problems.

× But when the topic is really personal, that time I prefer to chat with only one friend. It gives up personal space.

✓ But when the topic is really personal, I prefer to chat with only one friend. It gives us personal space.

'It gives up personal space' is incorrect; 'up' should be 'us' to indicate the benefit to the speaker and friend.

× Well, I always prefer to communicate face to face because it gives a real natural experience.

✓ Well, I always prefer to communicate face-to-face because it gives a real, natural experience.

'Face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adjective or adverb. Also, a comma is needed between 'real' and 'natural' as coordinate adjectives.

× When we meet with our friends in person. That time we enjoy a lot, but some are due to our visit schedules we cannot meet in face to face.

✓ When we meet our friends in person, we enjoy a lot, but sometimes due to our visit schedules, we cannot meet face-to-face.

The original has sentence fragments and awkward phrasing. 'When we meet with our friends in person.' is a fragment. Also, 'some are due to' is incorrect; it should be 'sometimes due to'. 'Meet in face to face' should be 'meet face-to-face'.

× That time we may talk via social media.

✓ At that time, we may talk via social media.

'That time' should be 'At that time' to correctly indicate a point in time.

× Yes, sometimes I argue with my friends when I think that I am right but they are wrong and but that time I show tried to show the thing that is right.

✓ Yes, sometimes I argue with my friends when I think that I am right but they are wrong, and at that time I try to show the correct point.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect verb forms. 'show tried to show' is incorrect; it should be 'try to show'. Also, 'the thing that is right' is better expressed as 'the correct point'.

× But I always try to avoid arguing because I think that for arguing I can lost my friend.

✓ But I always try to avoid arguing because I think that by arguing I can lose my friend.

'can lost' is incorrect; modal verb 'can' should be followed by base form 'lose'. Also, 'for arguing' is better expressed as 'by arguing'.