Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some redundancy and hesitation. Try to be more concise and clear, avoid filler words like 'umm', and complete your sentences properly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends, especially about fashion and entertainment. Talking to them helps me relax and feel energized. After a long conversation with my best friend, I often feel more productive and motivated.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'personal life' and try to elaborate a bit more with specific examples.

例: Usually, I discuss personal matters with my friends, such as our experiences with in-laws. Since most of us are married, we often share tips on maintaining peace of mind in family life.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and structure your answer clearly with linking words. Also, avoid filler words and complete your sentences properly.

例: It completely depends on the situation and topic. For example, I prefer group chats when discussing general topics like the price of gold, but I share personal views with a close friend. So, my preference varies according to the conversation.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by reducing hesitation and using more natural expressions. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication with my friends and family whenever possible. However, due to time constraints and balancing household chores and work, I mostly connect with them through social media.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid filler words. Also, provide a reason or example to support your answer for better content.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends when our opinions differ and I believe my view is correct. However, I avoid frequent arguments to maintain good relationships.

× When I'm at Chatterbox and people person, I love talking to my friends, especially on the topics related to fashion and entertainment.

✓ When I'm at Chatterbox and a people person, I love talking to my friends, especially on topics related to fashion and entertainment.

The phrase 'people person' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it because it is a singular countable noun. Also, 'on the topics' should be 'on topics' as the topics are general, not specific ones. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Umm after having a long conversation with my best friend, I am more fruitful and and.

✓ Umm after having a long conversation with my best friend, I am more fruitful and energetic.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and and' which is incomplete. Adding 'energetic' completes the thought. Also, 'fruitful' is an adjective that can describe productivity, but pairing it with 'energetic' makes the sentence clearer and more natural.

× Usually I talk to my friends regarding my personal life and their own experiences about their personal life.

✓ Usually I talk to my friends about my personal life and their own experiences regarding their personal life.

The preposition 'regarding' is better used with 'experiences' rather than 'talk'. 'Talk about' is the correct collocation. Also, 'about their personal life' is better expressed as 'regarding their personal life' to avoid repetition and improve clarity.

× Now as I'm married and most of my friends are married too, we talk about our in-laws and how all we can have some Peace of Mind.

✓ Now as I'm married and most of my friends are married too, we talk about our in-laws and how all of us can have some peace of mind.

The phrase 'how all we can have' is incorrect; it should be 'how all of us can have' to correctly refer to the group. Also, 'Peace of Mind' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun; here it is a common phrase, so lowercase is appropriate.

× When it 2 completely depends upon the scenario and my topic of discussion.

✓ When it completely depends upon the scenario and my topic of discussion.

The '2' in the sentence appears to be a typographical error and should be removed for the sentence to make sense.

× Sometimes I want to discuss, uh, things like, uh, uh, maybe the price of gold with a group of people and, uh, my personal perspective with one of my friend.

✓ Sometimes I want to discuss, uh, things like, uh, maybe the price of gold with a group of people and, uh, my personal perspective with one of my friends.

The phrase 'one of my friend' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun. Therefore, 'friends' is correct here.

× So it really depends what kind of chatting I want to, uh, put upon.

✓ So it really depends on what kind of chatting I want to, uh, engage in.

The phrase 'depends what kind' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on what kind'. Also, 'put upon' is not appropriate here; 'engage in' is the correct phrasal verb for participating in chatting.

× Well, given a chance, I would like to talk to my friends and my family relatives face to face.

✓ Well, given a chance, I would like to talk to my friends and my family relatives face-to-face.

'Face to face' should be hyphenated when used as an adverbial phrase modifying 'talk'. This is a standard convention in English to clarify meaning.

× But because of lack of uh time and being very occupied with my household chores and work life balance, it is mostly through social media that I can connect with my kith and kin.

✓ But because of lack of, uh, time and being very occupied with my household chores and work-life balance, it is mostly through social media that I can connect with my kith and kin.

'Work life balance' should be hyphenated as 'work-life balance' to correctly form a compound noun. Also, commas around 'uh' improve readability.

× Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends if my opinion does not match with them and I think that I am more, uh, correct with that point of view.

✓ Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends if my opinion does not match theirs and I think that I am more, uh, correct in that point of view.

The phrase 'match with them' is incorrect; it should be 'match theirs' to correctly compare opinions. Also, 'correct with that point of view' should be 'correct in that point of view' to use the correct preposition.