Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için, gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi doğrudan soruya yanıt verecek şekilde yapılandırmalı ve destekleyici detayları bağlaçlarla bağlamalısınız.

例: Yes, I especially enjoy chatting with my best friend Pearl because our conversations are very relaxing, and she is a very empathetic person.

提案: Cevabınızı daha açık ve mantıklı yapmak için, soruya doğrudan yanıt verip, destekleyici detayları mantıklı bağlaçlarla eklemelisiniz. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız.

例: We usually chat about our daily lives and try to connect at least twice a week, although sometimes our busy schedules make it difficult.

提案: Cevabınızı daha net ve tutarlı yapmak için, doğrudan soruya yanıt verip, nedenlerinizi açık ve bağlantılı cümlelerle ifade etmelisiniz. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız.

例: I prefer chatting with only one friend because it is easier to connect deeply, while group conversations can be confusing due to different perspectives.

提案: Cevabınızı daha anlaşılır ve etkili yapmak için, cümlelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla bağlamalı, dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, nedenlerinizi daha spesifik şekilde açıklamalısınız.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows me to feel closer to others and build stronger friendships compared to social media.

提案: Cevabınızı daha açık ve mantıklı yapmak için, doğrudan soruya yanıt verip, nedenlerinizi net ve bağlantılı cümlelerle ifade etmelisiniz. Ayrıca, dolgu kelimelerini ve tekrarları azaltmalısınız.

例: I argue with my friends occasionally, usually because we have similar opinions and sometimes disagree on everyday matters.

× Yes, I love especially with my best friends who names Pearl and I like that uh, because of a relaxing moments and uh, she's very empathetic person.

✓ Yes, I especially love chatting with my best friends whose names are Pearl, and I like that because of the relaxing moments, and she is a very empathetic person.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'who names Pearl' instead of 'whose names are Pearl' to show possession. Also, 'she's very empathetic person' lacks an article before 'very empathetic person'. The pronoun 'she' refers to a singular person, so 'person' needs 'a' before it.

× Yes, I love especially with my best friends who names Pearl and I like that uh, because of a relaxing moments and uh, she's very empathetic person.

✓ Yes, I especially love chatting with my best friends whose names are Pearl, and I like that because of the relaxing moments, and she is a very empathetic person.

The phrase 'a relaxing moments' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'moments'. It should be either 'a relaxing moment' or 'relaxing moments' without 'a'.

× That's often, uh, that's awful moment, uh, in my life, uh, we try to, uh, connect, uh, with each other twice a week, uh, if we are very busy, uh, very busy, you know, about schedule.

✓ Often, those are awful moments in my life. We try to connect with each other twice a week if we are very busy with our schedules.

The phrase 'that's awful moment' incorrectly uses singular 'moment' with 'that's' referring to plural 'moments'. Also, 'about schedule' is vague and should be 'with our schedules'. The quantifier 'those' fits plural 'moments' better.

× That's often, uh, that's awful moment, uh, in my life, uh, we try to, uh, connect, uh, with each other twice a week, uh, if we are very busy, uh, very busy, you know, about schedule.

✓ Often, those are awful moments in my life. We try to connect with each other twice a week if we are very busy with our schedules.

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used with 'schedule'. The correct preposition is 'with' when referring to being busy with something.

× I prefer only one, uh, person, uh, because my friends, uh, have uh, uh, different perspectives in their life. Uh, they have, uh, uh, they, they can, uh, they can find this connection.

✓ I prefer only one person because my friends have different perspectives in their lives. They can find this connection.

The phrase 'in their life' should be 'in their lives' because 'friends' is plural, so the possessive noun should be plural as well.

× I prefer face to face interaction, uh, compared to, uh, social media interactions, uh, because I can, uh, I can feel, uh, distance of uh, society and uh, friendship, uh, it's very, uh, useful connection, uh, to and might.

✓ I prefer face-to-face interaction compared to social media interactions because I can feel the distance in society and friendship. It's a very useful connection to have.

The phrase 'distance of society and friendship' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'distance in society and friendship'. Also, 'to and might' is unclear and corrected to 'to have' for clarity.

× I prefer face to face interaction, uh, compared to, uh, social media interactions, uh, because I can, uh, I can feel, uh, distance of uh, society and uh, friendship, uh, it's very, uh, useful connection, uh, to and might.

✓ I prefer face-to-face interaction compared to social media interactions because I can feel the distance in society and friendship. It's a very useful connection to have.

The phrase 'to and might' is unclear and seems to misuse modal verbs. It is corrected to 'to have' to express possibility or usefulness properly.

× I, I argue, uh, oftenly, I can say, uh, we have, uh, same perspectives and, and same positions, uh, in daily life because of this, uh, we generally argue with, uh, general situations.

✓ I argue often, I can say. We have the same perspectives and positions in daily life. Because of this, we generally argue about general situations.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'often'. Also, 'argue with general situations' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'argue about'.