Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и избегать повторений. Следует улучшить грамматику и связность, например, убрать повтор "when I when I" и сделать предложение более плавным.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me relax and share my thoughts. For instance, yesterday I talked with my best friend when I was feeling sad, and it made me feel much happier.

提案: Ответ содержит непонятные фразы и ошибки, например, "One J in and one J out" и "it's very interesting actions". Следует использовать более точные выражения и избегать слов-паразитов.

例: I usually chat with my friends about our daily lives, including school, work, and hobbies. We often share funny stories, which help us stay connected and relax after a busy day.

提案: Ответ хороший, но есть небольшие ошибки, например, "the their persons" и слова-паразиты "uh". Следует избегать таких ошибок и сделать речь более плавной.

例: If I had to choose, I prefer chatting with just one friend because it allows for deeper and more meaningful conversations. One-on-one talks help me focus on their feelings and thoughts, which builds a stronger connection.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и слова-паразиты, например, "more better" и "UMM". Следует использовать правильные выражения и избегать лишних звуков.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it is better than social media. In person, I can read facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand others better, especially during important conversations.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно добавить связующие слова для лучшей связности и немного расширить детали.

例: I occasionally argue with my friends, but these disagreements are usually brief and help us understand each other better. For example, we might debate about movies or current events, which often lead to interesting conversations rather than conflicts.

× For example, yesterday I chatted with my best friend and when I when I was sad and it's helped me make me happy.

✓ For example, yesterday I chatted with my best friend when I was sad and it helped me feel happy.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past and present perfect tenses ('it's helped me make me happy'). The correct past tense 'helped' should be used to maintain consistency. Also, 'make me happy' should be 'feel happy' for natural expression.

× One J in and one J out chat with my friends about our daily lives, such as school, work, or hobbies.

✓ I usually chat with my friends about our daily lives, such as school, work, or hobbies.

The phrase 'One J in and one J out' is unclear and does not form a proper sentence. Replacing it with 'I usually' corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning.

× Moreover, it's very interesting actions.

✓ Moreover, these are very interesting activities.

'It's very interesting actions' is incorrect because 'it's' (it is) cannot refer to plural 'actions'. Also, 'interesting' should describe 'activities' rather than 'actions' for natural usage.

× If I should choose, I prefer chatting with only one friend because it allows for deeper and more meaningful conversations.

✓ If I had to choose, I prefer chatting with only one friend because it allows for deeper and more meaningful conversations.

The modal verb 'should' is incorrectly used here. The correct conditional phrase is 'If I had to choose' to express preference.

× When talking one-on-one, it's easier to focus on the their persons, uh, feelings and thoughts uh, which helps build a stronger connection.

✓ When talking one-on-one, it's easier to focus on their feelings and thoughts, which helps build a stronger connection.

The phrase 'the their persons' is incorrect. 'Their' already indicates possession, and 'persons' is unnecessary. The correct phrase is 'focus on their feelings and thoughts'.

× Of course face to face because it's more better than UMM via social media.

✓ Of course face to face because it's better than via social media.

The phrase 'more better' is incorrect because 'better' is already a comparative adjective. Using 'more' with 'better' is redundant.

× When talking in person, I can read facial experience and body language which helps me understand the other people better, for example during important conversations.

✓ When talking in person, I can read facial expressions and body language which helps me understand other people better, for example during important conversations.

'Facial experience' is incorrect; the correct term is 'facial expressions'. Also, 'the other people' should be 'other people' for general reference.