Museum— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'in very important' and 'specimens and things'. Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

例: Yes, I believe museums are very important because they display a variety of artifacts that showcase different cultures and our history.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, such as 'a wide range of discovered' and 'to interest and come visit'. Try to clarify your ideas and use correct sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your sentences smoothly.

例: No, there are not many museums in my hometown, but there is one particularly famous museum that showcases a wide range of artifacts from ancient China, which attracts many visitors.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentence more natural. For example, 'I don't really often visit' is awkward; instead, say 'I don't often visit'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas.

例: No, I don't often visit museums, but whenever I do, I make sure to spend my time wisely and absorb as much information as possible about the cultural relics.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and contains grammatical errors. For example, 'is in summer holiday' should be 'was during the summer holiday'. Also, the list of exhibits is unclear and unstructured. Try to organise your answer with linking words and clearer descriptions.

例: The last time I visited a museum was during the summer holiday. I went to a museum in Shanghai that focused on extinct animals, including dragons and other species, displaying their bones and discoveries.

× Yes, I believe museums are in very important because they exhibit lots of specimens and things in different cultures and about our history.

✓ Yes, I believe museums are very important because they exhibit lots of specimens and things from different cultures and about our history.

The phrase 'in very important' is incorrect; the preposition 'in' should be removed to correctly use the adjective 'very important'. Also, 'in different cultures' should be 'from different cultures' to correctly express origin or source.

× No, there are not many museums in my hometown, but there is one particularly famous museum. It showcases a wide range of discovered from ancient China, which attracts many visitors to interest and come visit.

✓ No, there are not many museums in my hometown, but there is one particularly famous museum. It showcases a wide range of discoveries from ancient China, which attracts many visitors who are interested and come to visit.

The phrase 'a wide range of discovered' is incorrect; 'discovered' is a past participle and should be replaced with the noun 'discoveries'. Also, 'to interest and come visit' is awkward; it should be 'who are interested and come to visit' to correctly express the visitors' interest and action.

× No, I don't really often visit a museum, but every time I visit a museum I spend my time wisely and trying to absorb all the information I can about every cultural relic.

✓ No, I don't really often visit a museum, but every time I visit a museum I spend my time wisely and try to absorb all the information I can about every cultural relic.

The phrase 'I spend my time wisely and trying' mixes verb forms incorrectly. After 'and', the verb should be in the base form 'try' to parallel 'spend'. Using 'trying' here is incorrect.

× The last time I visited a museum is in summer holiday. I visited a museum in Shanghai, all about extinct animals, Dragons and other kind of animals, the bones and their discoveries.

✓ The last time I visited a museum was in the summer holiday. I visited a museum in Shanghai, all about extinct animals, dragons and other kinds of animals, the bones and their discoveries.

The phrase 'is in summer holiday' should be in past tense 'was in the summer holiday' to match the past event. Also, 'Dragons' should not be capitalised unless it is a proper noun, and 'other kind of animals' should be pluralised to 'other kinds of animals' to agree in number.