Museum— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Try to use correct verb forms and linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and be concise.

例: Yes, I think museums are very important because they preserve our cultural traditions by keeping old objects, artworks, and inventions created by past artists. Moreover, they attract tourists, which benefits the local economy.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Use proper tenses and complete your sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Actually, there aren't many museums in my hometown. We only have a small local museum that displays traditional items and historical photos. Therefore, most people usually visit museums in nearby cities.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'surviving with me'. Avoid such mistakes and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, keep your sentences concise and relevant.

例: To be honest, I don't visit museums very often. However, I usually go when there is a special exhibition or when I travel to a new city. I especially enjoy visiting museums with my girlfriend because we share similar interests.

提案: Your answer is good but repetitive with 'very very interesting'. Try to use varied vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Well, the last time I visited a museum was about six months ago. I went with my girlfriend, and it was fascinating because we saw ancient artifacts and many historical photos.

× I believe museums play very important role for our society.

✓ I believe museums play a very important role in our society.

The phrase 'very important role' requires an article 'a' before 'very important role' because 'role' is a singular countable noun. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'in' to correctly express the relationship with 'our society'.

× Firstly the preserve our culture tradition by keeping the old objects, arts and invention which were created by the old artist in the past and it helps to attract the tourist as.

✓ Firstly, they preserve our cultural traditions by keeping old objects, arts, and inventions which were created by old artists in the past, and it helps to attract tourists.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'the preserve' should be 'they preserve' as the subject is plural; 'culture tradition' should be plural and adjective form 'cultural traditions'; 'invention' should be plural 'inventions'; 'old artist' should be plural 'old artists'; 'the tourist as' is incorrect and should be 'tourists'. Also, commas and conjunctions are needed for clarity.

× Actually there aren't many museums in my hometown.

✓ Actually, there aren't many museums in my hometown.

This sentence is correct in singular/plural usage but missing a comma after 'Actually' for better readability.

× We just have small local museum that shows the traditional items and historical photos.

✓ We just have a small local museum that shows traditional items and historical photos.

The phrase 'small local museum' requires the article 'a' before it because 'museum' is a singular countable noun. Also, 'the traditional items' should be 'traditional items' without 'the' to generalize the items.

× Most of the people usually go to the cities and they visited their.

✓ Most of the people usually go to the cities and they visit there.

The sentence mixes present tense 'go' with past tense 'visited'. To maintain tense consistency, 'visited' should be 'visit'. Also, 'their' is incorrect here; it should be 'there' to indicate place.

× I usually go there when there is a special exhibition or when I travel to a new city.

✓ I usually go there when there is a special exhibition or when I travel to a new city.

This sentence is correct in preposition usage.

× But I really enjoy to visit the museum, especially with my girlfriend because surviving with me.

✓ But I really enjoy visiting the museum, especially with my girlfriend because she is surviving with me.

The phrase 'enjoy to visit' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy visiting' (verb + -ing form). Also, 'surviving with me' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'she is living with me' or 'she is staying with me' depending on intended meaning.

× Well, the last time I visited a museum was about 6 months ago.

✓ Well, the last time I visited a museum was about 6 months ago.

This sentence is correct in past tense usage.

× I went there with my girlfriend and it was very interesting because we saw very very interesting ancient article artifacts and many historical photos.

✓ I went there with my girlfriend and it was very interesting because we saw very interesting ancient artifacts and many historical photos.

The phrase 'very very interesting' is redundant; one 'very' is sufficient. Also, 'ancient article artifacts' is incorrect; 'article' is unnecessary and should be removed to say 'ancient artifacts'.