Museum— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "it arose people to learn" should be "they allow people to learn" and "museums has" should be "museums have." Also, try to avoid vague phrases like "greater impact on the society" without explanation. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I think museums are very important because they allow people to learn about history and other valuable knowledge. Moreover, museums play a significant role in educating society and preserving culture.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by being more specific and using better vocabulary. Instead of "lots of contents," say "a wide variety of exhibits." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas more naturally.

例: Yes, there are many museums in Japan. For instance, the Tokyo National Museum displays a wide variety of exhibits related to Japanese culture, which helps foreigners understand our traditions better.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains tense inconsistencies and some awkward phrasing. For example, "I often go" should be "I often went." Also, try to use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly and avoid redundancy.

例: Honestly, I don't visit museums often now. However, when I was a child, I often went to the museum in my hometown as part of my school curriculum, which was a valuable experience.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. "I could run a wide range" is incorrect; you might mean "I saw a wide range." Also, specify the time more clearly and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: The last time I visited a museum was when I was a university student. At that time, I saw a wide range of historical objects related to Japanese culture, which was very interesting.

× Yes, I think museums are crucial because it arose people to learn history and other important knowledge.

✓ Yes, I think museums are crucial because they allow people to learn history and other important knowledge.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it' to refer to 'museums', which is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'arose' is the past tense of 'arise' and does not fit here; the correct verb is 'allow' to express enabling people to learn.

× Also museums has a greater impact on the society.

✓ Also, museums have a greater impact on society.

The subject 'museums' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. Additionally, 'the society' is incorrect; 'society' is generally used without 'the' when speaking in general terms.

× For example, Tokyo Museum has a lot of objects related to Japanese culture, which provides foreigners with lots of contents.

✓ For example, the Tokyo Museum has a lot of objects related to Japanese culture, which provides foreigners with lots of content.

The name of the museum should be preceded by 'the' as it is a specific place. 'Contents' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'content' is correct.

× However, when I was a child, I often go to the museum in my hometown and study some history as a part of school curriculum.

✓ However, when I was a child, I often went to the museum in my hometown and studied some history as a part of the school curriculum.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so past tense verbs 'went' and 'studied' should be used instead of present tense 'go' and 'study'. Also, 'the school curriculum' is more natural.

× I visited the museum last time when I was a university student.

✓ The last time I visited a museum was when I was a university student.

The original sentence has awkward word order and article usage. 'The last time I visited a museum' is the correct phrase. Also, 'a museum' is better than 'the museum' unless a specific museum is known.

× At that time, I could run a wide range of historical objects related to Japanese culture.

✓ At that time, I could see a wide range of historical objects related to Japanese culture.

The verb 'run' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'see' or 'view' a wide range of objects.