Museum— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'a museum are' nên là 'museums are' hoặc 'a museum is'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, museums are important because they preserve memories of antiquities and conserve many precious items that have historical, artistic, and national significance.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng nhiều từ ngập ngừng như 'uh' và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng chính xác và cụ thể hơn để mô tả các bảo tàng.

例: In my hometown, there are a few museums, such as a historical museum and a city museum, which preserve many artworks and historical artifacts.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều từ ngập ngừng và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cụ thể hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng.

例: I don't visit museums very often, but sometimes when I need inspiration, I go to museums to learn about the local city's history and stories.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến thì của động từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các câu và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I so have reading'.

例: The last time I visited a museum was last year when I traveled to Nateang City. I visited the Ocean Museum, which has many types of fish and marine life, such as turtles, starfish, and coral. I also read a lot of information about them there.

× Yes, a museum are important because it's keep memories of antiquities and conserve many precious thing that have meaning of history, art and national.

✓ Yes, a museum is important because it keeps memories of antiquities and conserves many precious things that have meaning in history, art, and nationality.

The subject 'a museum' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'it' refers to the museum, so the verb should be 'keeps' and 'conserves' in third person singular form. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with 'things'. 'Meaning of history, art and national' is incorrect; it should be 'meaning in history, art, and nationality' for clarity and correctness.

× Uh, in my hometown, uh, it just have a fair museum like, uh, for example, like a historical museum and national, uh, City Museum, Uh, it's a, uh, memorized so many art and uh, previous thing, uh.

✓ Uh, in my hometown, there is just a few museums, like, for example, a historical museum and a national city museum. Uh, they have memorized so much art and previous things.

'It just have' is incorrect; 'it' is singular but 'have' is plural verb. The correct form is 'there is' for existence and 'a few museums' (plural). 'Memorized' is incorrectly used; it should be 'have preserved' or 'have collected' but keeping 'memorized' as is, the sentence is corrected to plural subject 'they have'. 'Previous thing' should be plural 'previous things'.

× Now, uh, beside uh museum I like to visit Galileo more. But sometime when I stuck in my idea, uh, I visit to museum to read many story of local city and history to uh finding.

✓ Now, besides museums, I like to visit Galileo more. But sometimes when I am stuck in my ideas, I visit museums to read many stories about the local city and history to find information.

'Beside' should be 'besides' to mean 'in addition to'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' for frequency. 'When I stuck' is incorrect; it should be 'when I am stuck' (present tense with 'am'). 'I visit to museum' is incorrect; 'visit' does not require 'to' and 'museum' should be plural 'museums'. 'Many story' should be 'many stories'. 'To uh finding' is incorrect; it should be 'to find'.

× The last time I visited a museum is last year. When I travel to Nateang City I visit the Ocean Museum. There is so much type of fish and marine life. For example is turtle, starfish and coral. I so have reading about many information of this.

✓ The last time I visited a museum was last year. When I traveled to Nateang City, I visited the Ocean Museum. There were many types of fish and marine life. For example, turtles, starfish, and coral. I also read a lot of information about this.

'Is last year' should be 'was last year' to match past tense. 'When I travel' should be 'when I traveled' (past tense). 'I visit' should be 'I visited' (past tense). 'There is so much type' should be 'there were many types' (plural and past tense). 'For example is turtle' should be 'for example, turtles' (plural). 'I so have reading' is incorrect; it should be 'I also read' (past tense). 'Many information' is uncountable, so 'a lot of information' is better.