Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 話が冗長で、躊躇語（umm, uh）が多く、文法的な誤りや時制の不一致（"don't go... recently"や"usually go"）があります。IELTSでは明確で簡潔なトピック文を最初に述べ、その後で具体的な理由や例をつけると良いです。また、つなぎ言葉を適切に使い、不必要な繰り返しを減らしましょう。例えば現在は働いているため行かないこと、大学時代は専門書を探すためによく行っていたことを別の文で整理して述べると自然になります。

例: To be honest, I don't go to the library now because I started working. When I was a university student, I used to go regularly to look for specialist nursing books and to study in a quiet environment.

提案: 答えは内容が分かるものの、表現が不自然で繰り返しがあります（"specialist books for nursing fields"や"study focusing more frequently"）。短く明確なトピックセンテンスを使い、理由や具体例を一つ付け加えると良いです。つなぎ表現（for example, mainly, to）を使って流れを良くしましょう。

例: I usually go to the library to find specialist nursing textbooks and to study quietly. For example, I often used the library's reference section when preparing for clinical exams.

提案: 二重語（"my my"）や语法ミス（"is a voracious readers"）、時制の混同（"usually visit visited"）が見られます。まず簡潔に“Yes, I did.”と答え、その後に理由や具体的な活動（絵本を読む、DVDを借りる）を一つか二つの正しい文で述べましょう。語彙はシンプルで正確に使ってください。

例: Yes, I did. My father was an avid reader and he took me to the library every weekend, so I often read picture books there or borrowed DVDs to watch at home.

提案: 答えが回りくどく、文法ミスや繰り返し（"going going"）が多いです。質問に対して短く率直に答え、知らない点はそのまま伝えた上で、関連する自分の知識（例：日本の状況）を比較として述べると良いです。接続詞（however, but）を適切に使い、自然な語順で話しましょう。

例: I'm not sure about Chinese children, as I'm Japanese and not very familiar with their daily habits. However, in Japan many children do use libraries, although it often depends on their parents' encouragement.

× I don't go to the library recently because umm, I already started to work and however, uh, when I was a university student, I usually go to the library in order to, umm, seek some expertise books, which is for uh, nursing field.

✓ I haven't been going to the library recently because I started work, but when I was a university student, I usually went to the library to look for specialist books for the nursing field.

The student mixes present simple and present perfect with time expressions: 'recently' should use present perfect continuous or present perfect (I haven't been going / I haven't gone), and 'already started to work' is better as 'I started work' or 'I have already started work'. Also 'usually go' should be past 'usually went' to match 'when I was a university student'. Suggestion: use consistent tenses that match the time frame (present perfect for recent actions affecting now; simple past for completed past actions).

× I usually look for some specialist books for nursing fields or I visit there in order to study focusing more frequently.

✓ I usually look for specialist books on nursing, or I go there to study more often.

'Visit there' is unnatural; use 'go there'. 'Focusing' is incorrectly used: the intended meaning is 'to study more often' or 'to focus more on studying'. Use the base verb or adverbial phrase ('to study' / 'to study more often'). Suggestion: choose correct verb forms and natural collocations ('look for specialist books on nursing'; 'go there to study').

× Yes, I did because my my father is a voracious readers and he always took me to the library every weekend.

✓ Yes, I did because my father was a voracious reader and he always took me to the library every weekend.

'My father is a voracious readers' has singular/plural and tense issues: 'father' is singular so the noun should be 'reader' not 'readers'. Also 'did' and 'took' refer to past habits; use past simple 'was' for 'voracious reader'. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with subject and keep tense consistent for past descriptions ('was a voracious reader').

× Therefore, I usually visit visited there to read some picture books or watch the DVDs there.

✓ Therefore, I usually visited there to read picture books or watch DVDs there.

The phrase contains both 'visit' and 'visited' together; choose past simple 'visited' to match past context. Also 'the DVDs' is better as 'DVDs' unless specific discs are meant. Suggestion: remove duplicate verbs and use correct past tense ('visited').

× I do not know about the Chinese kids are often going going to the libraries because I am a Japanese and I am not familiar with that umm local Chinese kids are doing in their daily lives.

✓ I don't know whether Chinese kids often go to libraries because I am Japanese and not familiar with what local Chinese kids do in their daily lives.

The original mixes clauses and repeats words ('going going') and uses awkward pronouns/structures. Use 'whether' for indirect yes/no questions and 'what ... do' to describe habitual actions. Also 'I am a Japanese' is unnatural; say 'I am Japanese'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, avoid repetition, and use correct pronouns and clause structures for indirect questions.

× However, Japanese kids are going to the library.

✓ However, Japanese kids do go to the library.

'Are going to the library' suggests a current ongoing action; to talk about a general habit, use simple present 'do go' or 'usually go'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions ('Japanese kids usually go to the library').

× I usually went to the library to look for specialist books for the nursing field.

✓ I usually went to the library to look for specialist books on the nursing field.

When referring to a subject area, use the preposition 'on' or 'in' rather than 'for' after 'books'. 'Books on the nursing field' or better 'books on nursing'. Suggestion: use 'books on' or 'books about' to indicate subject matter.