Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid repeating ideas, correct grammar (use present simple), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Include one specific detail (e.g. distance or local situation) to make it natural.

例: I don't often go to the library because there isn't a modern one near my home. The closest public library is over 10 kilometers away, and the local branches have limited opening hours, so I usually read at home instead.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific activities. Use past/present simple consistently and remove fillers (uh, um). Use linking words to connect activities (for example, and, then).

例: When I visit the library, I usually look for new fiction or language-learning books and then ask a librarian for recommendations. For example, last month I borrowed a Spanish grammar book after the librarian suggested it.

提案: Use correct past tense phrasing and avoid contradictory or confusing labels. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give one concrete reason and, if relevant, a short example. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child because there wasn't one near my home. Also, as a child I preferred playing alone or outside rather than visiting public places.

提案: Give a direct opinion, avoid vague fillers, and support your view with one specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because, however). Avoid sweeping generalizations; qualify your statement (e.g. many, some).

例: I'm not sure, but I think many Chinese children do visit libraries because schools and parents often encourage reading. For example, I have seen news stories about after-school reading programs and weekend library classes for children.

× I definitely would if I had a modern library somewhere near my home, but there is nothing so it's hard for me to find a place for reading and all libraries are now cancelled and restricted, so it's really difficult.

✓ I definitely would if I had a modern library near my home, but there is none, so it's hard for me to find a place to read, and all libraries are currently closed or have restrictions, so it's really difficult.

Multiple issues: 'there is nothing' is unnatural for place absence; use 'there is none' or 'there isn't one' (article/word choice). 'for reading' should be 'to read' (verb infinitive after 'place'). 'cancelled and restricted' is awkward for libraries closed or operating with restrictions; use 'closed or have restrictions'. Also keep tense/modal 'would' is fine in hypothetical conditional. Improve cohesion and word choice for clarity.

× If I visit library, usually I try. I'm trying to find a new book for reading and speaking with a guide, uh, to learn more about the offer or uh, about the variety of foreign books they can offer.

✓ If I visit the library, I usually try to find a new book to read and to speak with a librarian to learn more about their offerings or the variety of foreign books they have.

Missing article 'the' before 'library' (article error). 'Usually I try. I'm trying to find' is redundant; combine into 'I usually try to find'. 'for reading' should be 'to read' (use infinitive, not gerund after 'find a book'). 'speaking with a guide' should be 'speaking with a librarian' (word choice). 'offer' should be plural noun 'offerings' or 'what they offer' and 'they can offer' -> 'they have' for clarity. Present participle 'reading' used incorrectly; use infinitive or noun.

× I didn't used to go to libraries in my childhood because I I've never had a library near my home and also I was quite a social and antisocial child that don't need a company so.

✓ I didn't use to go to libraries when I was a child because I never had a library near my home, and I was quite an unsociable child who didn't need company.

Use 'didn't use to' (base form after did). 'in my childhood' -> 'when I was a child' (natural expression). 'I I've never had' contains redundancy and tense conflict; use simple past/ever: 'I never had'. 'social and antisocial' contradicts; likely 'unsociable'. 'that don't need a company' has pronoun and agreement errors: use relative 'who didn't need company' (no article 'a' with 'company' meaning companionship). Subject-verb agreement corrected.

× I don't know to be honest, but I hope so because, uh, all news I saw from about Chinese kids shows that they are really clever and enthusiastic for achieving, achieving, uh, new knowledge.

✓ I don't know, to be honest, but I hope so because all the news I've seen about Chinese kids shows that they are really clever and enthusiastic about gaining new knowledge.

Minor word order: 'I don't know to be honest' -> 'I don't know, to be honest'. 'all news I saw from about' is ungrammatical: use 'all the news I've seen about'. Use present perfect 'I've seen' for recent experiences. 'enthusiastic for achieving' -> 'enthusiastic about gaining' (preposition and verb choice). Repetition removed and phrasing smoothed. 'shows' agrees with 'all the news' treated as singular collective; could also use 'show' if plural.

× And I found it's really inspiring.

✓ I find it really inspiring.

Tense mismatch: previous sentence uses present perspective; 'I found' (past) should be present 'I find' to express general feeling. Better sentence structure: 'I find it really inspiring.'