Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat relevant but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to avoid redundancy like "I used to" repeated and unclear phrases such as "Any books that are related?". Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially during my high school days when I visited weekly to borrow novels and literature books that interested me.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like "descriptions given in the bag" and repeated ideas. Try to organize your answer with clear linking words and avoid repetition. Also, correct grammar mistakes and complete your sentences.

例: Usually, I search for books that interest me by reading their descriptions. If I find a book appealing, I borrow it. Additionally, I sometimes use the library as a quiet place to study.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases such as "when I was scared" and "I had dressed on my on and dressed on books". Try to express your ideas clearly and logically with correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: No, I didn't often go to the library as a child because I was busy with many classes every week. However, I started visiting the library more frequently when I grew older and became interested in reading on my own.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains pronunciation errors like "skates" instead of "kids" and redundant phrases like "homeworks works". Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Generally, Chinese kids don't often go to the library because they have a lot of homework and are busy, so they don't have much extra time to read other books.

× When I was in my high school, I used to go every week after I finished one book and I used to read some novels or literatures.

✓ When I was in high school, I used to go every week after I finished one book and I used to read some novels or literature.

The phrase 'in my high school' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in high school'. Also, 'literatures' is incorrect because 'literature' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× Any books that are related?

✓ Are there any books that are related?

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'Are there' forms a proper question structure.

× I usually go search for a book that I'd like.

✓ I usually go to search for a book that I'd like.

The verb 'go' should be followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating purpose, as in 'go to search'.

× I read the descriptions given in the bag.

✓ I read the descriptions given on the back.

The word 'bag' is incorrect here; it should be 'back' referring to the back cover of the book.

× And if I want and quiet place to study.

✓ And if I want a quiet place to study.

The sentence is incomplete and contains an extra conjunction 'and'. It should be 'a quiet place' with the article 'a' before 'quiet place'.

× No, no. I didn't usually go to the library when I was scared.

✓ No, no. I didn't usually go to the library when I was a kid.

The word 'scared' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'a kid' to indicate childhood.

× We had like very classes every week.

✓ We had many classes every week.

The phrase 'like very classes' is incorrect; 'many' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns like 'classes'.

× I only went at that time.

✓ I only went at that time.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× But when I grew up and I had dressed on my on and dressed on books, then I started to go to library after I was older, yes.

✓ But when I grew up and I had learned on my own and read books, then I started to go to the library after I was older, yes.

The phrase 'dressed on my on and dressed on books' is incorrect. It should be 'learned on my own and read books'. Also, 'go to library' needs the article 'the' before 'library'.

× Umm, so Chinese skates don't often go to the library because I think they have a lot of homeworks works to do, and we're just busy doing those works and we don't have any extra time to go to study different books.

✓ Umm, so Chinese students don't often go to the library because I think they have a lot of homework to do, and we're just busy doing that work and we don't have any extra time to study different books.

The word 'skates' is incorrect; it should be 'students'. 'Homeworks works' is incorrect; 'homework' is uncountable and should not be pluralized, and 'work' is uncountable as well.