Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: आपके उत्तर में दोहराव और व्याकरण की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'when when' और 'I spent I spent'। उत्तर को संक्षिप्त और स्पष्ट बनाएं, और वर्तमान और भूतकाल के बीच अंतर स्पष्ट करें।

例: I used to visit the school library often when I was a child because it helped me broaden my perspective and made me feel more creative and productive. However, nowadays I don't go there as frequently.

提案: उत्तर में वाक्य संरचना और शब्दों का उपयोग सुधारें। 'library computers' और 'technological new technological tools' जैसे वाक्यांश अस्पष्ट हैं। उत्तर को अधिक स्पष्ट और प्रवाहपूर्ण बनाएं।

例: Whenever I visit the library, I usually spend most of my time reading comics and fiction books. I also use the library computers to search for information about new technological tools.

提案: उत्तर में दोहराव और व्याकरण की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'because it helps me' और 'I was eager to learn new books' दो बार। उत्तर को संक्षिप्त, स्पष्ट और व्याकरणिक रूप से सही बनाएं।

例: Yes, I used to visit the library very often as a child because it helped me broaden my perspective and made me more productive and creative. I was always eager to learn new things from books.

提案: उत्तर में कुछ व्याकरण और शब्द चयन की गलतियाँ हैं, जैसे 'physical involved in physical books'। उत्तर को अधिक स्पष्ट और प्रवाहपूर्ण बनाएं, और विषय से संबंधित रहें।

例: I am not sure about Chinese children, but nowadays, most kids prefer reading online content rather than visiting libraries or reading physical books because it is more convenient to access everything on a single mobile phone.

× I used to go to the library when when I was a child.

✓ I used to go to the library when I was a child.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'when'. This is a redundancy error and should be corrected by removing the duplicate to improve clarity and correctness.

× I spent I spent most of my times in school library because it helps me to broaden my perspective and made me feel made me more creative and productive.

✓ I spent most of my time in the school library because it helped me to broaden my perspective and made me feel more creative and productive.

The phrase 'most of my times' is incorrect; 'time' is an uncountable noun here and should be singular. Also, 'school library' needs the definite article 'the'. The verbs should be consistently in past tense to match the time frame.

× Whenever I do visit library, I spend most of the time on reading.

✓ Whenever I visit the library, I spend most of the time reading.

The phrase 'do visit library' is awkward; 'do' is unnecessary here. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'spend time on reading' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'spend time reading' without 'on'.

× Comics and fiction books, and I also use computer library computers for searching technological new technological tools.

✓ I read comics and fiction books, and I also use library computers to search for new technological tools.

The phrase 'computer library computers' is redundant and confusing; it should be 'library computers'. The phrase 'searching technological new technological tools' is awkward; 'to search for new technological tools' is correct. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, Sir. When I was a young child, I used to visit library very often because it helps me, because it helps me broaden my perspective and make me productive and creative.

✓ Yes, Sir. When I was a young child, I used to visit the library very often because it helped me broaden my perspective and made me productive and creative.

'Visit library' needs the definite article 'the'. The verbs should be in past tense ('helped', 'made') to match the time frame. The repeated phrase 'because it helps me' is redundant and should be simplified.

× And I also used to spend more time in library because it I was eager to learn new books and I was eager to learn new books.

✓ And I also used to spend more time in the library because I was eager to learn from new books.

'In library' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'learn new books' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'learn from new books'. The repeated phrase 'I was eager to learn new books' is redundant and should be removed.

× I don't know anything about Chinese kids because I'm Indian, but nowadays most children prefer to read online content rather than going to library or physical involved in physical books because it makes them more convenient and easy to read using one single mobile phone.

✓ I don't know anything about Chinese kids because I'm Indian, but nowadays most children prefer to read online content rather than going to the library or using physical books because it is more convenient and easier to read using a single mobile phone.

'Going to library' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'physical involved in physical books' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'using physical books'. 'It makes them more convenient and easy' is incorrect; the subject 'it' refers to reading online content, so 'it is more convenient and easier' is correct. 'One single mobile phone' is better expressed as 'a single mobile phone'.