Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, nên giới hạn câu trả lời trong 4-5 câu, tránh lặp từ và nói dài dòng.

例: Yes, I often go to the library when I have free time. My school library has several floors with many books. I enjoy reading there because it helps me focus on my studies and learn new things.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ vựng chính xác và đa dạng hơn để thể hiện ý rõ ràng.

例: In the library, I usually read books that help me relax and concentrate. There are many useful materials for my studies and hobbies. For instance, I often read reference books and novels that expand my knowledge and improve my language skills.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi lặp và thiếu rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc.

例: When I was a child, I rarely went to the library because I preferred reading at home. I often found reading boring and had trouble concentrating for a long time. For example, I would get distracted easily and procrastinate.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng hơn. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh nói lan man.

例: Yes, I believe many Chinese children often go to the library because they value education. They read many books to gain knowledge and improve their skills.

× I usually go to rival library when I have a free time and also they have several library in different floors at my school and I really enjoy reading book in libraries because it keep me focused a lot on my studies and also.

✓ I usually go to the rival library when I have free time and also they have several libraries on different floors at my school and I really enjoy reading books in libraries because it keeps me focused a lot on my studies.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'rival library' to specify which library is meant. 'A free time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable here, so 'free time' without an article is correct. 'Several library' should be plural 'several libraries' to match the quantifier. 'In different floors' should be 'on different floors' because 'on' is the correct preposition for floors. 'Reading book' should be plural 'reading books' because it refers to multiple books. 'It keep' should be 'it keeps' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I usually enjoy reading in the library because it's help me relax and focus.

✓ I usually enjoy reading in the library because it helps me relax and focus.

The verb 'help' must agree with the third person singular subject 'it', so it should be 'helps'.

× There are many books available which provide useful materials for both my academic assessment and personal interest.

✓ There are many books available which provide useful materials for both my academic assessments and personal interests.

'Assessment' and 'interest' should be plural to match the context of multiple academic assessments and personal interests.

× For example, I often find reference book and novel that brought my knowledge and improved my language skills.

✓ For example, I often find reference books and novels that broaden my knowledge and improve my language skills.

'Reference book' and 'novel' should be plural to match 'often find' implying multiple items. 'Brought' should be 'broaden' to correctly express expanding knowledge in present tense. 'Improved' should be 'improve' to maintain parallel present tense.

× As a child, I really went to I really went to the library because I prefer reading books at home.

✓ As a child, I really went to the library because I preferred reading books at home.

'Prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to match the past time frame 'as a child'.

× I often found reading a bit boring and had difficulty concentrating for a long period.

✓ I often found reading a bit boring and had difficulty concentrating for long periods.

'For a long period' is better expressed as 'for long periods' to indicate repeated or general experience.

× For example, I would usually procrastinate and get distracted easily, which makes it hard to enjoy books outside my comfort zone.

✓ For example, I would usually procrastinate and get distracted easily, which made it hard to enjoy books outside my comfort zone.

'Makes' should be 'made' to maintain past tense consistency with 'would procrastinate'.

× Well, I think that I think absolutely yes, because as a result many Chinese kid have a high IQ and AQ.

✓ Well, I think absolutely yes, because as a result many Chinese kids have a high IQ and AQ.

'Kid' should be plural 'kids' to agree with 'many'.

× So I think that they have to rig a lot of books to get more knowledge and also they need to like improve their.

✓ So I think that they have to read a lot of books to get more knowledge and also they need to improve themselves.

'Rig' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'read'. The sentence is incomplete; 'improve their' should be completed as 'improve themselves' to make sense.