Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn đến thư viện.

例: Yes, I often go to the library almost every day because I need to find books related to my studies, especially chemistry, which I find difficult. The library provides a quiet place where I can focus and improve my understanding.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là chia động từ (studies -> study). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn. Hãy mô tả cụ thể hơn về hoạt động học tập và môi trường thư viện.

例: I usually study with my girlfriend and friends in the library because it offers a peaceful and relaxed environment that I cannot find elsewhere. This makes it the best place for me to concentrate on my studies.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Hãy thêm một vài chi tiết để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

例: I don't think I went to the library when I was a kid because I was too young to understand its purpose. Even if I had known, I probably would have found it uninteresting at that age.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đa dạng hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, có liên kết logic và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, I believe Chinese kids often go to the library to study because they are known for being hardworking and dedicated to their education, as shown on TV programs.

× Yes of course, I usually go to library nearly every day in a week just I want to find some book related to my studies, lesson visits book or chemistry book because I quite bad at this subject so I want to go to library to study.

✓ Yes of course, I usually go to the library nearly every day in a week just because I want to find some books related to my studies, like lesson visit books or chemistry books because I am quite bad at this subject so I want to go to the library to study.

In English, 'library' is a countable noun and usually requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' when referring to more than one. The phrase 'lesson visits book' is unclear and likely a mistranslation; it should be 'lesson visit books' or similar. The sentence also needs 'because' to connect the clauses properly. The verb 'am' is missing before 'quite bad'. Using 'the library' correctly specifies the place being talked about.

× I usually studies with my girlfriend and my friends.

✓ I usually study with my girlfriend and my friends.

The subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb without 's' in the present tense. 'Studies' is the third person singular form and is incorrect here. The correct verb form is 'study'.

× Just in there I can find a relaxed environment where I can never find in anywhere.

✓ Just there I can find a relaxed environment that I can never find anywhere else.

The phrase 'Just in there' is incorrect; 'Just there' is more natural. The phrase 'where I can never find in anywhere' is redundant and incorrect; 'that I can never find anywhere else' is the correct form. Prepositions 'in' and 'anywhere' should not be used together here.

× So I think that's the best place I I can study.

✓ So I think that's the best place I can study.

There is a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence structure.

× I don't think so. I think just because I was too young to know what the library is and if I know, I just think it would be something not interesting for me to go there.

✓ I don't think so. I think it's just because I was too young to know what the library was, and if I had known, I would have thought it would be something not interesting for me to go to.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'If I know' should be 'if I had known' to express a past unreal condition. 'Would be' is correct for hypothetical situations. Also, 'to go there' is better as 'to go to' in this context. Modal verbs and conditional forms need to be used properly to express past hypothetical situations.

× I think yes, I think Chinese kids will usually go to library to study because I see on the TV they are so hard working and really like studies, so I think they will go to library frequently.

✓ I think yes, I think Chinese kids will usually go to the library to study because I see on TV they are so hardworking and really like studying, so I think they will go to the library frequently.

Again, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. 'On the TV' should be 'on TV' as 'TV' is used without 'the' in this context. 'Hard working' should be one word 'hardworking'. 'Like studies' is incorrect; it should be 'like studying' to use the gerund form after 'like'.