Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ không cần thiết, làm cho câu trả lời không tự nhiên và khó hiểu. Bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ "because" và sắp xếp câu rõ ràng hơn để truyền đạt ý một cách hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books. The library provides a comfortable and peaceful environment, which helps me relax and focus.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như sử dụng đúng thì động từ (studying -> study). Ngoài ra, có những từ không phù hợp hoặc sai chính tả như "baseball atmosphere" và "necklace" khiến câu trả lời khó hiểu. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

例: I usually study and read books in the library because it has a quiet and comfortable atmosphere that helps me concentrate better.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ thừa như "uh" và chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "encouraged me reading" nên là "encouraged me to read". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn để người nghe dễ hiểu.

例: When I was a kid, there was no library in my district, so I didn't go to one. However, my parents encouraged me to read and built a small library at home where I could enjoy books.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "Vietnamese people" nên là "Vietnamese", và câu bị lặp từ không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but as a Vietnamese, I know that many Vietnamese children enjoy reading because we have a strong reading culture in Vietnam.

× Yes, I often go to the library because I really enjoy reading books and I because and in the library have a a comfortable and relaxation or a peaceful environment, so I really like.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because I really enjoy reading books and because the library has a comfortable and relaxing, peaceful environment, so I really like it.

The sentence contains redundant and incorrect conjunctions such as 'and I because and'. The correct conjunction to connect reasons is 'because'. Also, 'relaxation' should be 'relaxing' to describe the environment. The phrase 'have a a comfortable and relaxation or a peaceful environment' is ungrammatical; it should be 'has a comfortable and relaxing, peaceful environment'. Finally, 'so I really like' is incomplete and should be 'so I really like it.'

× I usually studying and reading books in library because because the library has a comfortable and baseball atmosphere which helps me concentrate better in library.

✓ I usually study and read books in the library because the library has a comfortable and peaceful atmosphere which helps me concentrate better in the library.

The verb 'studying' is incorrectly used after 'usually'; the base form 'study' should be used. Also, 'baseball atmosphere' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'peaceful atmosphere' fits better. The article 'the' is missing before 'library'.

× They don't have the necklace and make me confused.

✓ They don't have noise and it doesn't make me confused.

'Necklace' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'noise'. Also, 'They don't have the necklace' is ungrammatical; 'They don't have noise' is better. The sentence needs a subject for 'make me confused'; 'it' refers to the noise. So, 'it doesn't make me confused' is correct.

× Uh, because my districts don't have the library, So when I was a kid, I, uh, didn't go to the library, but my parents encouraged me, uh, reading books.

✓ Uh, because my district didn't have a library, when I was a kid, I didn't go to the library, but my parents encouraged me to read books.

'Districts' should be singular 'district' if referring to one area. 'Don't have the library' should be 'didn't have a library' to match past tense and indefinite article. 'Encouraged me, uh, reading books' is incorrect; it should be 'encouraged me to read books'.

× So they build, uh, they built a, a small library in my house and I can read book in this.

✓ So they built a small library in my house and I could read books there.

'Build' should be past tense 'built'. 'I can read book in this' is incorrect; 'I could read books there' fits past context and correct plural form.

× I don't know about a Chinese kid, but because I'm Vietnamese people, but I know the Vietnamese kid really like in really glad reading books and they really enjoyed them because in Vietnam we have a a culture of the reading books, so I think they love.

✓ I don't know about Chinese kids because I'm Vietnamese, but I know Vietnamese kids really like and enjoy reading books because in Vietnam we have a culture of reading books, so I think they love it.

'A Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids' to generalize. 'I'm Vietnamese people' is incorrect; 'I'm Vietnamese' is correct. 'Vietnamese kid really like in really glad reading books' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Vietnamese kids really like and enjoy reading books'. 'They really enjoyed them' is unclear; 'enjoy' is better in present tense. 'Culture of the reading books' should be 'culture of reading books'. 'So I think they love' is incomplete; 'they love it' is correct.