Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct minor grammatical errors. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I have a lot of work to do. When I study there, my efficiency improves significantly, allowing me to finish tasks quickly.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. Also, try to vary your vocabulary and sentence structure to make your answer more engaging and natural.

例: I usually conduct research in the library because I find it difficult to concentrate at home or in the classroom. Therefore, I prefer the library environment, which helps me focus better and complete my work efficiently.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'you know' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and express your thoughts more naturally and fluently.

例: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because I wasn't aware that studying there could significantly improve my efficiency and benefit my learning.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words, and improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

例: Yes, Chinese children frequently visit the library because the competition among them is intense. They study hard there to achieve good grades and succeed academically.

× Yes, I often go to the library because I always have a lot of work to do and when when I stay in the library, my efficiency can reach a very high level, which allow me to finish my work in a very short time.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because I always have a lot of work to do and when I stay in the library, my efficiency can reach a very high level, which allows me to finish my work in a very short time.

The word 'allow' should be in the third person singular form 'allows' to agree with the singular subject 'which' referring to 'my efficiency'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue (ID 2). Also, the repeated word 'when' is a typographical error and should be removed for clarity.

× So yeah, I often go to library.

✓ So yeah, I often go to the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Omitting 'the' is an article error (ID 22).

× I usually do some research in the library because I find it hard to focus on my research in the other place like my home, my classroom, my office.

✓ I usually do some research in the library because I find it hard to focus on my research in other places like my home, my classroom, my office.

The phrase 'in the other place' is incorrect because 'other' should be plural to match 'places'. Also, 'in other places' is the correct prepositional phrase here. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and quantifiers (ID 11 and 14).

× So I choose to go to my library and study and work on my research and that helped me a lot.

✓ So I choose to go to the library and study and work on my research and that helps me a lot.

The possessive pronoun 'my' is unnecessary here because 'the library' is sufficient and more natural. Also, the verb tense should be present tense 'helps' to match 'choose' and the habitual action. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and present tense issue (ID 12 and 6).

× No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I didn't realize that staying in library to finish my work has such a great, you know, great improvement on my efficiency and have such great benefits to my study.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I didn't realize that staying in the library to finish my work has such a great, you know, great improvement on my efficiency and has such great benefits to my study.

The phrase 'staying in library' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'library', which is necessary here. Also, the verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'staying in the library'. These are article errors and subject-verb agreement errors (ID 22 and 27).

× Yes, they all often go to the library very often because the competition between the Chinese kids are very, you know, very intense and every children must work very, very hard to get a good degree and to compete with the other children.

✓ Yes, they often go to the library very often because the competition between the Chinese kids is very, you know, very intense and every child must work very, very hard to get a good degree and to compete with the other children.

The phrase 'every children' is incorrect because 'every' requires a singular noun, so it should be 'every child'. Also, 'competition ... are' should be 'competition ... is' because 'competition' is singular. These are incorrect use of pronouns and subject-verb agreement errors (ID 12 and 27).

× So they use the library where they can study very hard.

✓ So they use the library where they can study hard.

The adverb 'very' is unnecessary before 'hard' because 'study hard' is a fixed expression. This is an incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13).