Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about why you like horror stories or what you enjoy about the library visits.

例: Yes, I often go to the library early in the morning, usually from 6 to 7 AM. I enjoy reading horror stories there because they are thrilling and keep me engaged.

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and natural by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Provide more specific details about the ancient stories you read and why you find them interesting.

例: Usually, I spend about an hour sitting in the library reading books. I especially enjoy stories about ancient times because they teach me about history and culture.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly with a topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Clarify your mother's explanation and your feelings as a child.

例: When I was a kid, I wanted to go to the library a lot, but my parents did not allow me because I was too young. However, I was very curious about books even then.

提案: Avoid giving uncertain or vague answers. If you don't know, say so clearly. Try to add your opinion or a general comment about library use among children instead of guessing.

例: I am not sure about Chinese children, but generally, many kids enjoy going to libraries to read and learn new things.

× Yes, I daily go to the library mostly at the morning time at 6:00 AM to 7:00 AMI go to library and read about the books of the horror stories.

✓ Yes, I mostly go to the library daily in the morning from 6:00 AM to 7:00 AM. I go to the library and read books about horror stories.

The adverb 'daily' is incorrectly placed; it should come after the auxiliary or before the main verb. Also, 'mostly' should be placed before 'go' to indicate frequency. 'At the morning time' is incorrect; 'in the morning' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'I go to library' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'library'. 'Read about the books of the horror stories' is awkward; it should be 'read books about horror stories'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I mostly read books in a library while I'm sitting.

✓ I mostly read books in the library while I'm sitting.

When referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener, the definite article 'the' should be used before 'library'. Using 'a library' suggests any library, but here it is specific.

× I mostly read books one hour.

✓ I mostly read books for one hour.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'for' to indicate duration. 'Read books one hour' is incomplete; 'for one hour' correctly expresses the time spent reading.

× In the books I read about the stories of the ancient time.

✓ In the books, I read about stories from ancient times.

The phrase 'stories of the ancient time' is incorrect; it should be 'stories from ancient times'. Also, a comma after 'books' improves readability.

× I asked to my mother, she told me.

✓ I asked my mother, and she told me.

The verb 'ask' does not require the preposition 'to' before the object. Also, the two independent clauses should be connected properly with 'and'.

× She told me that while you are a small child, you have so much of craze to go to library but they don't allow me to move to library because at that time I was a child.

✓ She told me that when I was a small child, I was very eager to go to the library, but they didn't allow me to go because I was a child at that time.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes present tense ('you are', 'you have') with past tense narration. It should be in past tense to match 'She told me'. 'Craze' is informal and awkward; 'eager' or 'very interested' is better. 'Go to library' needs 'the' before 'library'. 'Move to library' is incorrect; 'go to the library' is appropriate.

× No, I do not have the knowledge of the Chinese people, but I have written somewhere that Chinese people do not go to libraries.

✓ No, I do not have knowledge about Chinese people, but I have read somewhere that Chinese people do not often go to libraries.

'Have the knowledge of' is awkward; 'have knowledge about' is better. 'I have written somewhere' is incorrect; the student likely means 'I have read somewhere'. Adding 'often' clarifies frequency.