Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and focus on one main idea with supporting details. Also, avoid mixing metaphors like 'a whole new world' and 'travel to different places' which can confuse the listener. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it helps me gain knowledge and meet new people. Moreover, I enjoy the peaceful environment which allows me to focus better.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas and by avoiding repetition, such as 'peaceful and relaxed place'. Also, try to be more specific about the subjects or types of books you study or read.

例: Usually, I read mostly fictional books. In addition, I study difficult subjects like mathematics in the library because it is much more peaceful than my hostel, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating phrases like 'when I was a child'. Also, clarify your points more specifically and avoid vague statements like 'pictures that were'.

例: Yes, I used to go to a beautiful local library as a child. Although I didn't read many books then, I enjoyed looking at the pictures in the books because they were very colorful and interesting.

提案: Your answer is indirect and speculative. Try to answer more directly and avoid making assumptions without evidence. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide a clearer opinion or explanation.

例: I'm not certain if Chinese kids often go to the library. However, I believe many of them do because reading books can help improve knowledge and intelligence.

× I often go to the library as it's a place of gaining knowledge and meeting new people.

✓ I often go to the library as it's a place for gaining knowledge and meeting new people.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used after 'place'. The correct preposition is 'for' when indicating purpose or function, so it should be 'a place for gaining knowledge'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× libraries are much more peaceful and relaxed place.

✓ libraries are much more peaceful and relaxed places.

The subject 'libraries' is plural, so the noun 'place' should also be plural to agree in number. Using 'places' matches the plural subject and maintains subject-noun agreement.

× I went there to see the pictures that were.

✓ I went there to see the pictures that were there.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'were'. Adding 'there' completes the relative clause and clarifies the meaning, improving sentence structure.