Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'one times a week' nên là 'once a week'. Bạn cũng nên tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: No, I don't go to the library very often. Usually, I visit once a week or once a month to borrow books, which I prefer to read at home.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'to reading book' nên là 'to read books'. Câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp ý, bạn nên dùng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp lại thông tin. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú và chính xác hơn.

例: People usually go to the library to read books, but I don't have time to read there. Therefore, I just borrow books and read them at home, returning them when I'm done.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ 'when I were a KISS' nên là 'when I was a kid'. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lặp lại từ không cần thiết.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my hometown was poor and there was no library nearby. However, now there are many libraries, so I visit them more often.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'then go to library' nên là 'than going to the library'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc và dùng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

例: No, not really. Honestly, kids prefer watching TV or using smartphones rather than going to the library. Moreover, since many books are available online, they don't visit libraries often.

× I usually go there one times a week or one time a month because I when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read in my home.

✓ I usually go there once a week or once a month because when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read at home.

The phrase 'one times' is incorrect because 'times' is plural and 'one' indicates singular. The correct form is 'once' to express frequency. Also, 'read in my home' is better expressed as 'read at home' for natural English usage.

× I usually go there one times a week or one time a month because I when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read in my home.

✓ I usually go there once a week or once a month because when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read at home.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'borrow a book to my home'; the correct preposition is 'borrow a book from the library to my home' or simply 'borrow a book and take it home'. Also, 'read in my home' should be 'read at home' for natural English.

× I usually go there one times a week or one time a month because I when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read in my home.

✓ I usually go there once a week or once a month because when I go there I will borrow a book to my home and I will read at home.

The phrase 'because I when I go there' is ungrammatical and redundant. It should be simplified to 'because when I go there' to improve sentence clarity and structure.

× I go to library when I want to take off the book.

✓ I go to the library when I want to borrow a book.

The phrase 'take off the book' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'borrow' when referring to taking a book from the library. Also, 'to library' needs the definite article 'the' as 'to the library'.

× Normally people go to the library to reading book, but I don't have time to spend in reading book at the library, so I go there to borrow to my homes and read it at home and when I want to return that book I will go to the library again.

✓ Normally people go to the library to read books, but I don't have time to spend reading books at the library, so I go there to borrow books to my home and read them at home, and when I want to return those books I will go to the library again.

The phrase 'to reading book' is incorrect; the verb after 'to' should be in base form 'read'. Also, 'spend in reading book' should be 'spend reading books'. 'Borrow to my homes' is incorrect; it should be 'borrow books to my home'. 'Read it' should be 'read them' to agree with plural 'books'. 'Return that book' should be 'return those books' to maintain plural consistency.

× Normally people go to the library to reading book, but I don't have time to spend in reading book at the library, so I go there to borrow to my homes and read it at home and when I want to return that book I will go to the library again.

✓ Normally people go to the library to read books, but I don't have time to spend reading books at the library, so I go there to borrow books to my home and read them at home, and when I want to return those books I will go to the library again.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple books in general. Also, 'homes' should be singular 'home' as it refers to the student's own home.

× No, when I were a KISS, I don't have chance to go to the library because in my country is I'm still poor and there's no library around my home, so I don't have a chance to go to library in the past.

✓ No, when I was a kid, I didn't have a chance to go to the library because in my country I was still poor and there was no library around my home, so I didn't have a chance to go to the library in the past.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for first person singular; it should be 'was'. 'KISS' is likely a typo for 'kid'. The present tense 'don't have' should be past tense 'didn't have' to match the past time frame. 'In my country is I'm still poor' is ungrammatical and should be 'in my country I was still poor'. 'There's no library' should be past tense 'there was no library'. 'Go to library' needs the article 'the' as 'go to the library'.

× No, when I were a KISS, I don't have chance to go to the library because in my country is I'm still poor and there's no library around my home, so I don't have a chance to go to library in the past.

✓ No, when I was a kid, I didn't have a chance to go to the library because in my country I was still poor and there was no library around my home, so I didn't have a chance to go to the library in the past.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the'. It should be 'go to the library' because 'library' is a specific place.

× But now there are so many library and I go there more.

✓ But now there are so many libraries and I go there more often.

The noun 'library' should be plural 'libraries' to agree with 'so many'. Also, 'go there more' is incomplete; 'more often' is the correct phrase to express increased frequency.

× No not at all. Honestly kids prefer watching TV or smartphone then go to library.

✓ No, not at all. Honestly, kids prefer watching TV or using smartphones rather than going to the library.

'Smartphone' should be plural 'smartphones' to match 'kids'. 'Go to library' needs the article 'the' as 'go to the library'. Also, 'then' is incorrect in this context; 'rather than' is the correct conjunction to show preference.

× No not at all. Honestly kids prefer watching TV or smartphone then go to library.

✓ No, not at all. Honestly, kids prefer watching TV or using smartphones rather than going to the library.

The conjunction 'then' is incorrectly used; the correct conjunction to express preference is 'rather than'. Also, 'or smartphone' should be 'or using smartphones' for parallel structure.

× But if kids want to read book it's so many book in the Internet they can find so I think it's not often go to library.

✓ But if kids want to read books, there are so many books on the Internet they can find, so I think they don't often go to the library.

'Read book' should be plural 'read books'. 'It's so many book' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'there are so many books'. 'In the Internet' should be 'on the Internet'. 'It's not often go to library' should be 'they don't often go to the library' for correct subject and verb agreement and article usage.