Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、冗長な表現や文法の誤りがあります。例えば、「Yeah, yes」は重複しているためどちらか一方にし、"with which I have a free time"は不自然です。より簡潔で正確な表現を心がけましょう。

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially on weekends when I have free time. I enjoy reading various types of books, such as novels and music-related materials.

提案: 文法の時制の一致に注意しましょう。"sometimes I studied"は現在の習慣を表す場合、"sometimes I study"が適切です。また、接続詞の使い方を工夫し、より自然な流れにしましょう。

例: In the library, I usually read various books. However, sometimes I study there because it is very quiet. For example, I study English or business-related topics.

提案: 文法と語順に注意が必要です。"liked for prefer to going out"は不自然で、"preferred going out"などに修正しましょう。また、冗長な表現を避け、簡潔に答えることが大切です。

例: When I was a child, I didn't go to the library often because I preferred going outside to playing indoors.

提案: 文法ミスと語彙の誤用があります。"the Japanese kids likes"は"Japanese kids like"に修正し、"rivalry"は"library"の誤りと思われます。回答は明確にし、最後の文は未完成なので完結させましょう。

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Japan, many children like to go to the library. Some study there, while others enjoy reading or relaxing.

× So especially on the weekends with which I have a free time, I go to the library and read many types of books, such as novel or music.

✓ So especially on the weekends when I have free time, I go to the library and read many types of books, such as novels or music.

The phrase 'with which I have a free time' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use here is 'when' to indicate the time. Also, 'a free time' is incorrect because 'time' in this context is uncountable and does not need an article. Additionally, 'novel' should be pluralized to 'novels' to match 'many types of books.'

× So especially on the weekends with which I have a free time, I go to the library and read many types of books, such as novel or music.

✓ So especially on the weekends when I have free time, I go to the library and read many types of books, such as novels or music.

The word 'novel' should be pluralized to 'novels' because it refers to one of many types of books. 'Many types' implies plural, so the examples should also be plural.

× but sometimes I studied in the library space because library is quite quiet.

✓ but sometimes I study in the library space because the library is quite quiet.

The sentence is describing a habitual action, so the present tense 'study' should be used instead of the past tense 'studied.' Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' before it.

× but sometimes I studied in the library space because library is quite quiet.

✓ but sometimes I study in the library space because the library is quite quiet.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× So I studied my English or some business related topics in the library.

✓ So I study my English or some business-related topics in the library.

Since the sentence describes habitual actions, the present tense 'study' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'studied.' Also, 'business related' should be hyphenated as 'business-related' when used as a compound adjective.

× When I was a child, I would say I didn't go to the library so much and because I was a kid who liked for prefer to going out, so I don't go visit the library so much.

✓ When I was a child, I would say I didn't go to the library much because I was a kid who preferred going out, so I didn't visit the library much.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. Since it refers to past habits, past tense should be used consistently: 'didn't go,' 'preferred,' and 'didn't visit.' Also, 'liked for prefer to going out' is incorrect; it should be 'preferred going out.' 'So much' is better placed after the verb for natural phrasing.

× When I was a child, I would say I didn't go to the library so much and because I was a kid who liked for prefer to going out, so I don't go visit the library so much.

✓ When I was a child, I would say I didn't go to the library much because I was a kid who preferred going out, so I didn't visit the library much.

The phrase 'liked for prefer to going out' is incorrect. The correct form is 'preferred going out.' Also, 'go visit' is redundant; 'visit' alone suffices.

× Well, I'm not sure about this question because I'm not Chinese, but in terms of Japan, yes, the Japanese kids likes to go to the rivalry.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about this question because I'm not Chinese, but in terms of Japan, yes, Japanese kids like to go to the library.

'Kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' not 'likes.' Also, 'the rivalry' is a typo and should be 'the library.'

× Well, I'm not sure about this question because I'm not Chinese, but in terms of Japan, yes, the Japanese kids likes to go to the rivalry.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about this question because I'm not Chinese, but in terms of Japan, yes, Japanese kids like to go to the library.

When referring to a general group like 'Japanese kids,' the definite article 'the' is not necessary. Also, 'the rivalry' is incorrect; it should be 'the library.'

× Some children study in the library or while some others like to.

✓ Some children study in the library, while others like to do other activities.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'While some others like to' is a fragment and needs completion. Adding 'do other activities' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.