Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and more natural expressions. For example, say "I am the kind of person who is easily distracted by the surrounding environment." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I am the kind of person who is easily distracted by noise. The library offers a quiet and peaceful environment, which helps me focus better on my studies.

提案: Make sure to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use "and" or "also" appropriately. Avoid repetition like "as well" twice. Try to finish your thoughts clearly.

例: In the library, I usually spend time in the reading corner where I can quietly enjoy my favorite novels. I also like the research area because I can access many digital resources on the computer. Overall, the library is a great place for both reading and studying.

提案: Use past tense when talking about the past and avoid unclear phrases like "collaborate" if you mean "go" or "study." Also, clarify your ideas and avoid repetition. For example, say "I preferred reading paper books rather than electronic ones."

例: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because I preferred reading paper books to electronic ones. I often went there to study and find resources, especially since I had many exams to prepare for.

提案: Avoid incorrect word usage like "collaborate" when you mean "go" or "study." Use proper linking words and complete your sentences. For example, say "Chinese students often go to the library to study and do research because of the many exams they face."

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because they have many exams to prepare for. Teachers encourage students to study independently and use the library's resources to complete their homework and research.

× Yes I do, because I'm a kind of person who are really easy to be distracted from the alter environment.

✓ Yes I do, because I'm a kind of person who is really easy to be distracted by the outer environment.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'person', which is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'alter environment' seems to be a typo and should be 'outer environment'. The preposition 'from' should be 'by' to correctly express being distracted by something.

× So library basically provides a really quiet and free from the outer environment place for me to study.

✓ So the library basically provides a really quiet place, free from the outer environment, for me to study.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'Free from the outer environment' should be set off as a phrase describing the place. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. The preposition 'from' is correct here, but the sentence needs reordering for clarity.

× I really enjoyed the reading corner in the library.

✓ I really enjoy the reading corner in the library.

The question is about usual activities ('What do you usually do?'), so present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate instead of past tense 'enjoyed'.

× I can read my favorite novels quietly and also I really love the researching corners as well since I can look up for a lot of digital resources on the computer as well.

✓ I can read my favorite novels quietly and also I really love the research corners since I can look up a lot of digital resources on the computer.

The phrase 'look up for' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'look up' without 'for'. Also, 'researching corners' should be 'research corners' as 'researching' is a verb form, not an adjective here. The word 'as well' is redundant when 'also' is used.

× Overall, I think library is a very.

✓ Overall, I think the library is a very good place.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or complement after 'very'. Adding 'good place' completes the thought. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Yes I do since I I will prefer read paper works rather than the like electrical ones so I really like to collaborate and go there for studying and research for some resources and when I was a child I need to face a lot of exams so collaborate.

✓ Yes, I did since I preferred reading paper works rather than electronic ones. I really liked to go there for studying and researching resources. When I was a child, I had to face a lot of exams, so I studied hard.

The original sentence has multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('will prefer' should be past tense 'preferred'), incorrect verb forms ('read' should be 'reading'), awkward phrasing ('like electrical ones' should be 'electronic ones'), and unclear use of 'collaborate' which seems incorrect here. Also, 'need to face' should be past tense 'had to face'. The sentence is broken into clearer parts for better structure.

× Yes we do since in China we need to face a lot of examinations so we need to collaborate for studying and researching.

✓ Yes, we do since in China we need to face a lot of examinations, so we need to collaborate in studying and researching.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect after 'collaborate'; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to activities like studying and researching.

× Also in school teachers will encourage students to collaborate to studying and focus on their own homework as well.

✓ Also, in school, teachers encourage students to collaborate in studying and focus on their own homework as well.

The verb 'encourage' should be followed by 'to' plus base verb or 'to collaborate in studying'. 'Collaborate to studying' is incorrect; it should be 'collaborate in studying'. Also, 'will encourage' is changed to simple present 'encourage' to match habitual action.

× So overall Chinese students often go library to.

✓ So overall, Chinese students often go to the library.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the preposition 'to' before 'the library'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion.