Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library often when I was a child because I love reading books and stories. However, now I don't go as much due to my busy schedule.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'most of the people's'.

例: Usually, I read books and stories in the library because it is a quiet place. I find it easier to concentrate there compared to reading at home.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Provide a direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons. Use correct verb tenses and linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I went to the library often when I was a kid because I enjoyed reading books and stories. It was a fun and educational activity for me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly, then give specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because reading books helps improve their English. Also, the quiet environment makes it comfortable for them to focus on reading.

× Talking about a library book persons I used I love to read books and stories.

✓ Talking about library books, I used to love reading books and stories.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. It mixes unrelated words and phrases without clear connections. The correction clarifies the meaning by properly structuring the sentence and using 'used to' to indicate past habit.

× But now I because of the timetable I didn't have much time to.

✓ But now, because of my timetable, I don't have much time to go.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes past and present tenses and omits necessary words. The correction uses present tense 'don't have' to match the current situation and completes the sentence for clarity.

× I think not only me but the most of the people's read book and stories in the library.

✓ I think not only me but most people read books and stories in the library.

The phrase 'the most of the people's' is incorrect. 'Most people' is the correct quantifier without 'the' or possessive form. Also, 'read book and stories' should be plural 'books and stories'.

× Library is one of the quiet place where we go and read the novels and other books.

✓ The library is one of the quietest places where we go and read novels and other books.

'Quiet' should be in superlative form 'quietest' to describe 'one of the places'. Also, 'place' should be plural 'places' because 'one of the' refers to multiple places. 'The library' needs the definite article.

× So I think while reading in the library it's much better than reading at home.

✓ So I think reading in the library is much better than reading at home.

The phrase 'while reading in the library it's much better' is awkward. Removing 'while' and 'it's' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× If my memory back, I think I go to the light.

✓ If I remember correctly, I think I went to the library.

The original sentence uses incorrect phrases and tenses. 'If my memory back' is incorrect; 'If I remember correctly' is appropriate. 'I go' should be past tense 'I went' to match the past context. 'Light' is a typo for 'library'.

× I went to the library when I was a kid time because I love to read books and stories which makes me more like enjoyable.

✓ I went to the library when I was a kid because I loved to read books and stories, which made me enjoy it more.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Love' should be past tense 'loved' to match 'went'. 'Makes me more like enjoyable' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'made me enjoy it more' for clarity and correctness.

× I think not only the Chinese kid but all the kids going to the library reading books helped to improve their English and I think kids feel enjoyable when they go to the library stations and it because it is a quiet place so they feel more comfortable when they read in the.

✓ I think not only Chinese kids but all kids who go to the library and read books improve their English. I also think kids feel happy when they go to the library because it is a quiet place, so they feel more comfortable when they read there.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'the Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids'; 'going to the library reading books helped' is awkward and ungrammatical; 'feel enjoyable' is incorrect, should be 'feel happy'; 'library stations' is unclear, replaced with 'library'; sentence fragments and missing words corrected for clarity and grammar.