Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Avoid redundancy and ensure clarity by correcting sentence structures and verb forms. For example, say "I usually go to the library every other day" instead of "every other days". Also, avoid filler phrases like "I think" at the end when the statement is clear. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually go to the library every other day because it provides a calm environment where I can read and prepare for my future projects. It helps me relax and focus on my studies effectively.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Make sure to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid repetition such as "that that". Provide specific details about your activities in the library and organise your answer clearly.

例: First, I bring my coffee because it helps me concentrate. Then, I choose a useful book related to my project. Finally, I find a quiet spot to study, which helps me focus better.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. For example, say "we didn't have a public library" instead of "we hadn't a Public Library". Also, complete your sentences and avoid repetition like "a a". Provide more specific details about the home library to enrich your answer.

例: Unfortunately, we didn't have a public library when I was a child, so my parents never took me there. Instead, we had a small home library that my dad built himself and filled with books, which was very special and convenient for me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid vague phrases like "from my perspective" when you are unsure. Use correct sentence structures and vocabulary. For example, say "kindergartens often have libraries to encourage children to read and learn from stories." Provide a clear and concise answer with relevant details.

例: I am not sure, but I believe that many kindergartens in China have libraries to encourage children to read. This helps them gain knowledge easily through stories and develop good reading habits.

× I usually go to the library every other days.

✓ I usually go to the library every other day.

The phrase 'every other days' is incorrect because 'every other' is followed by a singular noun. The correct form is 'every other day' to indicate alternating days.

× I use it at a as a calm space in order to read and prepare my future projects.

✓ I use it as a calm space in order to read and prepare my future projects.

The phrase 'at a as a' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition here is 'as' to indicate the function of the library as a calm space.

× It's very helpful for me and enable me to relax and focus on my study, I think.

✓ It's very helpful for me and enables me to relax and focus on my study, I think.

The subject 'It' is singular, so the verb should be 'enables' to agree in number. 'Enable' is the base form and does not agree with the singular subject.

× I usually go to the library every other days.

✓ I usually go to the library every other day.

Repeated for clarity: 'every other' should be followed by a singular noun, so 'day' is correct instead of 'days'.

× I pick the useful book that that I'm trying to read or to prepare for the project.

✓ I pick the useful book that I'm trying to read or prepare for the project.

The phrase 'that that' is a repetition error. Removing the extra 'that' corrects the sentence.

× After that, take a special place, Quiet Place, in order to increase my.

✓ After that, I take a special place, a quiet place, in order to increase my concentration.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject. Adding 'I' as the subject and completing the sentence with 'concentration' clarifies the meaning.

× Unfortunately, during my childhood we hadn't a Public Library, so I don't remember that my parents took me into a library.

✓ Unfortunately, during my childhood we didn't have a public library, so I don't remember my parents taking me to a library.

The phrase 'hadn't a Public Library' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't have a public library'. Also, 'don't remember that my parents took me' should be 'don't remember my parents taking me' for natural expression.

× My dad made it with himself and collected.

✓ My dad made it himself and collected books.

The reflexive pronoun 'himself' is used incorrectly with 'with'. The correct form is 'made it himself'. Also, 'collected' is incomplete; adding 'books' clarifies the meaning.

× I think Chinese kids often have libraries in their kindergarten in order to meet them knowledgeable kids, and they can obtain knowledge easily from story.

✓ I think Chinese kids often have libraries in their kindergartens in order to meet knowledgeable kids, and they can obtain knowledge easily from stories.

'Kindergarten' should be plural 'kindergartens' to match 'kids'. 'Meet them knowledgeable kids' is incorrect; it should be 'meet knowledgeable kids'. 'Story' should be plural 'stories' to indicate multiple sources.