Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 중복되는 표현이 많습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 포함하여 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'I often go to the library to study before exams because it is quiet and has many books.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I often go to the library to study before exams because it is quiet and has a wide selection of books.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 있습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 이유나 구체적인 활동을 연결어와 함께 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

例: I usually read books or study for exams in the library because it is a quiet and comfortable place to focus.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 간결한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 명확하게 연결어와 함께 사용하세요.

例: Yes, I went to the library as a child because I had homework that required me to read many books.

提案: 답변이 불확실하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 확신을 가지고 명확한 의견을 제시하며, 비교를 할 때는 문법에 주의하세요.

例: Yes, I think Chinese kids often go to the library because there are more books available in China compared to Japan.

× Uh, when, when I have to study or like before exam, are you I go to the library to study and this library is very quiet and there are many books.

✓ Uh, when I have to study or before an exam, I go to the library to study. This library is very quiet and there are many books.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('are you I') and lacks proper sentence boundaries, causing confusion. Breaking it into two clear sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually read a book or study for exams in the library. I I don't really use library actually because but like library is the better place that you read that.

✓ I usually read a book or study for exams in the library. I don't really use the library often, but the library is a better place to read.

The original sentence has incorrect article usage ('use library' should be 'use the library') and awkward phrasing ('because but like'). Correcting articles and simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid, uh, because we have a homework that reading a book, read a book.

✓ Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid because we had homework that involved reading a book.

The sentence mixes present tense ('have') with past context and has awkward phrasing. Changing 'have' to 'had' and rephrasing improves tense consistency and clarity.

× So I have to read the many books I read.

✓ So I had to read many books.

The phrase 'the many books' is incorrect; 'many books' is the correct quantifier without 'the'. Also, tense is adjusted to past to match context.

× Maybe, maybe yes, because I think my my opinion, there are more books in China than Japan.

✓ Maybe, maybe yes, because in my opinion, there are more books in China than in Japan.

The phrase 'my my opinion' is redundant and 'than Japan' lacks the preposition 'in'. Adding 'in' before 'Japan' and correcting redundancy improves grammar.

× So I think China's kid more reading a book than Japanese kid.

✓ So I think Chinese kids read more books than Japanese kids.

The original sentence has singular/plural mismatches ('kid' instead of 'kids') and incorrect verb form ('more reading'). Correcting plural forms and verb usage improves grammatical accuracy.