Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then explain your feelings with clear sentences. Avoid redundancy and incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Actually, I don't often go to the library because I find it stressful. When it's very quiet, I get distracted easily, and when it's crowded, it's noisy, so I can't concentrate well.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'or' properly. Also, correct grammar mistakes and avoid repetition to make your answer more natural.

例: It depends on why I go to the library. For example, if I have an exam, I go there to study the subjects I need to review. Otherwise, I might go to read a book or do some painting because it's a quiet place.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but could be more structured. Start with a direct answer, then add supporting details with linking words. Avoid contradictory statements and be specific.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my parents didn't allow it. Instead, I studied in my room or my sister's room, which was quiet and peaceful for me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct response and avoid repeating phrases. If you don't know the answer, say so clearly and briefly. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: To be honest, I don't have any data about how often Chinese kids go to the library. However, I believe many do because libraries are common places for studying.

× Not actually I can't study or reading book in library.

✓ Not actually, I can't study or read books in the library.

The verb 'reading' should be in the base form 'read' after 'can't' because modal verbs are followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to match the context.

× Not actually I can't study or reading book in library.

✓ Not actually, I can't study or read books in the library.

The preposition 'in' should be followed by the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place like 'library'. So, it should be 'in the library'.

× I got a lot of I got stress and when everyone is so quiet and there is no voice, I got distracted very easily.

✓ I get a lot of stress, and when everyone is so quiet and there is no noise, I get distracted very easily.

The sentence has repetition and incorrect tense. 'Got' should be 'get' to indicate present tense. Also, 'no voice' is incorrect; 'no noise' is appropriate. The sentence structure is improved by removing repetition and adding commas.

× Then in a crowded and I don't know very.

✓ Then, in a crowded place, I don't know very well.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'place' after 'crowded' clarifies the meaning. 'I don't know very' is incomplete; it should be 'I don't know very well' to express uncertainty.

× I'll go to library to study the units I have an exam or just I need a quiet place for reading a book or draw a paint.

✓ I'll go to the library to study the units I have an exam on, or if I just need a quiet place to read a book or paint.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'. Also, 'for reading a book or draw a paint' is incorrect; it should be 'to read a book or paint'. 'Draw a paint' is incorrect; 'paint' is used as a verb here.

× I'll go to library to study the units I have an exam or just I need a quiet place for reading a book or draw a paint.

✓ I'll go to the library to study the units I have an exam on, or if I just need a quiet place to read a book or paint.

The phrase 'study the units I have an exam' needs the preposition 'on' after 'exam' to be correct: 'exam on'. Also, 'for reading' should be 'to read' to express purpose.

× I didn't go to library because, well, my parents didn't allow me, so I didn't go there.

✓ I didn't go to the library because, well, my parents didn't allow me, so I didn't go there.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' when referring to a specific place.

× And I studied in my room, in my sister's room.

✓ And I studied in my room, in my sister's room.

This sentence is correct in preposition usage; no correction needed.

× Actually, to be honest, yes.

✓ Actually, to be honest, yes, I did.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'I did' completes the thought and makes it grammatically correct.

× Well, to be honest and to be honest and clear, I don't have any data about their kids in China and I didn't study about their kids which go to library or not.

✓ Well, to be honest and clear, I don't have any data about kids in China, and I haven't studied whether they go to the library or not.

The phrase 'their kids' is unclear; 'kids' without 'their' is better here. Also, 'didn't study about' is incorrect; it should be 'haven't studied whether'. The sentence is also repetitive with 'to be honest' twice.

× And I think there are there are I I should have I should have a date to.

✓ And I think there are, I should have data too.

The sentence has repeated words and is incomplete. Removing repetitions and correcting 'date' to 'data' clarifies the meaning.