Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng số nhiều và số ít đúng cách.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place where I can concentrate fully on my studies. I prefer it since everyone there is focused, which helps me stay motivated.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng nhiều từ ngập ngừng như "uh" và hoàn thành câu trả lời một cách rõ ràng. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

例: In the library, I usually study and work on school projects. For example, I create PowerPoint presentations and prepare scripts for my presentations. I also review my subjects to improve my understanding.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và nói dài dòng.

例: To be honest, I did not go to the library much when I was a kid because I did not enjoy reading books. Also, there were many other activities that interested me more than going to the library.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không trang trọng như "uh" và "umm". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "they too lazy". Hãy cung cấp lý do rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they prefer spending time on activities like hanging out with friends or playing sports such as basketball and badminton. Also, many kids find reading boring and are not very motivated to read books.

× because as a teenagers and just a student, I need to spend a lot of time to for study

✓ because as a teenager and just a student, I need to spend a lot of time for studying

The word 'teenagers' is plural but the subject refers to a single person, so it should be singular 'teenager'. Also, 'to for study' is incorrect; it should be 'for studying' to express purpose correctly.

× I need to spend a lot of time to for study

✓ I need to spend a lot of time studying

The phrase 'to for study' is incorrect. The correct form is either 'to study' or 'for studying'. Here, 'spend time' is followed by a gerund, so 'studying' is appropriate.

× And I really prefer to go to library because as anyone, everybody in there.

✓ And I really prefer to go to the library because everyone is there.

The phrase 'as anyone, everybody in there' is unclear and incorrect. 'Everybody is there' is the correct expression. Also, 'to library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I just study, yeah, do some, uh, project at school

✓ I just study, yeah, do some projects at school

The word 'project' should be plural 'projects' to match 'some'.

× do some, uh, project at school

✓ do some projects at school

The quantifier 'some' requires a plural noun, so 'project' should be 'projects'.

× such as I, uh, create a PowerPoint or canvas

✓ such as creating a PowerPoint or a canvas

After 'such as', gerunds or noun phrases are preferred. Also, 'canvas' is unclear; if it refers to a presentation tool, it should be clarified or replaced.

× And also like, uh, make some script for my presentation at school.

✓ And also, like, make some scripts for my presentation at school.

'Script' should be plural 'scripts' to match 'some'. Also, a comma after 'also' improves clarity.

× And also I, uh, learn some subjects that.

✓ And also, I learn some subjects.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'that' which is incomplete. Removing 'that' completes the sentence.

× I don't go to the library when I was a kid

✓ I didn't go to the library when I was a kid

The past tense 'didn't go' is required to match the past time reference 'when I was a kid'.

× because when I just kidding

✓ because when I was just a kid

'Just kidding' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'just a kid'.

× don't have many stuff related to to do in library

✓ didn't have much stuff to do in the library

'Many' is used with countable nouns; 'stuff' is uncountable, so 'much' is correct. Also, 'to to do' is a typo and 'in library' needs the article 'the'.

× and also have many other activity can attract me rather than libraries.

✓ and also had many other activities that could attract me rather than the library.

'Activity' should be plural 'activities'. The verb tense should be past 'had'. 'Can' should be 'could' to match past tense. 'Libraries' should be singular 'library' to match context.

× they want to spend their time to all the activities such as hang out with friends

✓ they want to spend their time on activities such as hanging out with friends

The correct preposition is 'on' after 'spend time'. Also, 'hang out' should be in gerund form 'hanging out'.

× play basketball, football or badmintons

✓ play basketball, football, or badminton

'Badmintons' is incorrect; 'badminton' is uncountable and should not be pluralized.

× kids in my country don't really like to read book

✓ kids in my country don't really like to read books

'Book' should be plural 'books' to match the general meaning.

× they too lazy

✓ they are too lazy

The verb 'are' is missing before 'too lazy' to form a correct sentence.