Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs to be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'And there are wide material available', say 'because there is a wide range of materials available'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library when I need to focus on my studies or complete assignments because there is a wide range of materials available, and it provides a quiet environment free from distractions.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and articles. Also, add linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'I prefer to complete my assignments in the library because its quiet environment provides comfort, and I can study different kinds of books that are not easily found elsewhere.'

例: I prefer to complete my assignments in the library because its quiet environment provides comfort, and I can study different kinds of books that are not easily found elsewhere.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words. Also, use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'Yes, when I was a kid, I visited the library daily during my school days because there was a big library where I enjoyed reading storybooks. Moreover, my parents and teachers encouraged me to visit often.'

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I visited the library daily during my school days because there was a big library where I enjoyed reading storybooks. Moreover, my parents and teachers encouraged me to visit often.

提案: Your answer is informative but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words for clarity. For example, 'Yes, I remember reading an article a year ago that mentioned Chinese children aged 5 to 10 usually visit the library twice a day, especially at school, because there is a special time slot allocated for library visits.'

例: Yes, I remember reading an article a year ago that mentioned Chinese children aged 5 to 10 usually visit the library twice a day, especially at school, because there is a special time slot allocated for library visits.

× And there are wide material available so one can sit there and complete its research without any disturbance.

✓ And there is wide material available so one can sit there and complete their research without any disturbance.

The word 'material' is uncountable and should be treated as singular, so 'are' should be 'is'. Also, 'its' is incorrect for referring to a person; 'their' is appropriate here.

× I should be preferred to complete my assignments in library because it's quiet environment provide much comfort and I also study different kind of books which I cannot find anywhere else easily.

✓ I prefer to complete my assignments in the library because its quiet environment provides much comfort and I also study different kinds of books which I cannot find anywhere else easily.

'Should be preferred' is incorrect; 'prefer' is the correct verb. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'It's' should be 'its' (possessive). 'Provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject 'environment'. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds'.

× Yes, I when I was a kid I visit library on daily basis especially in my school days.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I visited the library on a daily basis especially in my school days.

The verb 'visit' should be in past tense 'visited' to match the past time frame. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'On daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'.

× In my school there was a big library and I just simply sit in a corner and read a lot of story books and my parents and teachers usually encourage me to visit library multiple times.

✓ In my school there was a big library and I just simply sat in a corner and read a lot of story books and my parents and teachers usually encouraged me to visit the library multiple times.

The verb 'sit' should be past tense 'sat' to match past context. 'Encourage' should be 'encouraged' for past tense. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Yes, I quite remembered an article which I read a year before in which there was clearly mentioned that Chinese kids especially from the age of 5 to 10, they usually visit library 2 times a day, especially in schools because they have a special slot fixed for for visit to library.

✓ Yes, I quite remember an article which I read a year ago in which it was clearly mentioned that Chinese kids especially from the age of 5 to 10 usually visit the library 2 times a day, especially in schools because they have a special slot fixed for visits to the library.

'Quite remembered' is incorrect; 'quite remember' fits better as the article is still remembered. 'A year before' should be 'a year ago'. 'There was clearly mentioned' should be 'it was clearly mentioned'. 'Visit' should be 'visits' or 'visiting' but here 'visits' is better. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. Removed duplicate 'for'.