Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy such as "also" and "too" together. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you go and what you do there.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, usually on Friday afternoons because I enjoy the quiet environment. Additionally, I like to listen to music while I study there.

提案: Make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about your reading preferences. Avoid unclear phrases like "I don't remember what is the right date."

例: In the library, I usually read books, especially crime novels, which I find very exciting and engaging.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to form complete sentences and clarify your meaning. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, mention who you went with, when, and what you read.

例: Yes, when I was in high school, my teacher Margarita often took my classmates and me to the library on Friday afternoons, where we usually read children's books.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use appropriate vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: In my opinion, many Chinese children do go to the library because reading is encouraged at school, and students often borrow books to improve their learning.

× Yes, I go often to the library, usually on Friday in the afternoon, because I like the environment is very quiet.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library, usually on Friday afternoon, because I like the environment; it is very quiet.

The adverb 'often' should be placed before the main verb 'go' for correct word order. Also, 'in the afternoon' is better expressed as 'afternoon' after the day. The sentence 'I like the environment is very quiet' is incorrect; it should be split into two clauses or rephrased for clarity.

× I usually do in the library, of course, read in the books, especially crime novels.

✓ I usually read books in the library, especially crime novels.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced phrases causing confusion. 'Do in the library' is vague and unnecessary. The phrase 'read in the books' is incorrect; it should be 'read books'. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I don't remember what is the right date, but I like crime novels.

✓ I don't remember the exact date, but I like crime novels.

The phrase 'what is the right date' is awkward and incorrect. 'The exact date' is a more natural and correct expression. Also, 'what is' is unnecessary here.

× Yes, I remember that in the high school usually my teacher Margarita every Fridays in the afternoon with my classmate.

✓ Yes, I remember that in high school, my teacher Margarita usually met with my classmates every Friday afternoon.

'In the high school' should be 'in high school' without 'the'. 'Every Fridays' is incorrect; it should be 'every Friday' (singular). The sentence structure is awkward and missing verbs; adding 'met with' clarifies the meaning. 'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates'.

× Usually reading as infantile books especially.

✓ I usually read children's books, especially.

'Reading as infantile books' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'read children's books'. The word 'infantile' is not appropriate here; 'children's' is the correct adjective. The sentence is incomplete and needs a subject and verb.

× In my opinion, yes, because it's not really that children's very smarter.

✓ In my opinion, yes, because children are not really that smart.

'Children's' is a possessive pronoun and incorrect here; it should be 'children'. 'Very smarter' is incorrect; 'smarter' is comparative and should not be preceded by 'very'. The sentence structure is awkward and needs correction.

× Everything in the high school read too many books for star learnings beginners.

✓ In high school, students read many books to improve their learning.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Everything in the high school' is unclear. 'Star learnings beginners' is nonsensical. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly and correctly.