Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating similar words. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I am an extrovert and prefer outdoor activities like sports. Therefore, I usually spend my free time outside rather than reading indoors.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: When I visit the library, I usually look for books that interest me. I read them to improve my knowledge and for self-development.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains tense errors and redundancy. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons.

例: No, I didn't go to the library much as a child because I preferred outdoor activities and sports instead.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'do you know' and use correct vocabulary. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words.

例: In China, many children prefer outdoor activities like football or cycling because these help them socialise and make new friends.

× Well to be honest actually no because I am a extrovert person so I always want to going out so I never go to the library rather than play sport or outdoor activity.

✓ Well, to be honest, actually no, because I am an extroverted person so I always want to go out, so I never go to the library but rather play sports or do outdoor activities.

The adjective 'extrovert' should be 'extroverted' to correctly describe a person. Also, 'want to going out' is incorrect; it should be 'want to go out' because 'want to' is followed by the base form of the verb. 'Play sport or outdoor activity' should be pluralized and parallel: 'play sports or do outdoor activities.' These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Well actually when I come to a library the first thing I do is I research a book I love and reading this to enhance my knowledge and self improvement.

✓ Well, actually, when I come to the library, the first thing I do is research a book I love and read it to enhance my knowledge and self-improvement.

The phrase 'a library' should be 'the library' because it refers to a specific place. 'I research a book I love and reading this' is incorrect; it should be 'research a book I love and read it' to maintain parallel verb forms and correct object reference. 'Self improvement' should be hyphenated as 'self-improvement.' These changes correct article usage, verb forms, and clarity.

× Well actually no, because looking back in the past when I was a kid, I prefer an outdoor activity and sport rather than the library, so I never go to it when I was a kid.

✓ Well, actually no, because looking back, when I was a kid, I preferred outdoor activities and sports rather than the library, so I never went to it when I was a kid.

The sentence refers to past events, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'prefer' becomes 'preferred' and 'go' becomes 'went.' Also, 'an outdoor activity and sport' should be pluralized to 'outdoor activities and sports' for consistency. These corrections ensure tense agreement and proper pluralization.

× Well in my country do you know the kids prefer outdoor activities such as football or cycle Cycle because this one to socialize with everyone and try out new friends.

✓ Well, in my country, kids prefer outdoor activities such as football or cycling because these help them to socialize with everyone and make new friends.

The phrase 'do you know' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. 'Cycle Cycle' is incorrect; it should be 'cycling.' 'This one' is vague and should be replaced with 'these' to refer to the activities. 'Try out new friends' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make new friends.' These corrections improve pronoun use, clarity, and idiomatic expression.