Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to use complete sentences, avoid redundancy, and organize your thoughts logically. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your experience.

例: I used to go to a beautiful library near my house that had many books, especially illustration books, which I enjoy. However, it closed about six months ago, so I haven't been going to the library as often since then.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, try to describe your activities in more detail to enrich your answer.

例: Usually, I go to the illustration books section to pick some books. Then, I order coffee or desserts from the library café. Sometimes, when the library is big enough to offer brunch, I enjoy eating while reading quietly by myself.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I really enjoyed reading as a child. Unlike other times in my life, I was very dedicated to reading and could sit in the library for two or three hours. Therefore, my mom often took me there to help develop my patience and reading skills.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words to organize your points clearly and use correct grammar and vocabulary relevant to the context.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library. Firstly, parents have high expectations and want their children to read more to become knowledgeable and well-educated. Secondly, there are many convenient libraries in every community, making it easy for kids to access them.

× I used to, they were really fancy and pretty library near my house.

✓ I used to, there was a really fancy and pretty library near my house.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'library' (singular) with 'they were' (plural). The correct form is 'there was' to indicate the existence of a singular library near the house.

× And there's a lot of books, especially the kind that I like, which is illustration books.

✓ And there are a lot of books, especially the kind that I like, which are illustration books.

'Books' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'which is illustration books' should be 'which are illustration books' to agree in number.

× so I didn't go to library that often after that, but still.

✓ so I didn't go to the library that often after that, but still.

The noun 'library' is singular and countable, so it requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× I will pick some books and I would order some cafe or desserts from the library.

✓ I will pick some books and I would order some coffee or desserts from the library.

'Cafe' is a noun meaning a place, not a drink. The correct word for the drink is 'coffee'.

× I will read quietly with myself and.

✓ I will read quietly by myself.

The phrase 'with myself' is incorrect. The correct reflexive pronoun usage here is 'by myself' to indicate doing something alone.

× Yes, I really enjoy reading.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed reading.

The question is about past habits ('Did you go to the library when you were a kid?'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'enjoyed'.

× I was really dedicated into reading when I was a kid.

✓ I was really dedicated to reading when I was a kid.

The correct preposition after 'dedicated' is 'to', not 'into'.

× She wanted to develop my patients and as well as my ability.

✓ She wanted to develop my patience as well as my ability.

'Patients' (people under care) is incorrect here; the intended word is 'patience' (the ability to wait calmly).

× Yes they do. First is that our parents have a slightly higher standard for us, that they want us to read more to became the kids that are well knowledge, well educated and secondly there's a lot of convenient library near every communities so it is easy for kids to just reach out.

✓ Yes, they do. First, our parents have slightly higher standards for us; they want us to read more to become kids who are well knowledgeable and well educated. Secondly, there are a lot of convenient libraries near every community, so it is easy for kids to just reach out.

Multiple issues: 'standard' should be plural 'standards' to match 'parents'; 'became' should be 'become' (infinitive form); 'well knowledge' should be 'well knowledgeable'; 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' for plural 'libraries'; 'library' should be plural 'libraries'; 'communities' is plural, so 'every' should be 'every community' (singular).