Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but avoid redundancy such as repeating 'library' multiple times. Also, 'Group' should not be capitalized. Try to use more varied vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I frequently visit the university library because it is one of the most modern and innovative facilities in Ho Chi Minh City. It offers a quiet and comfortable atmosphere, which helps me focus on my studies and collaborate with classmates during group discussions.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some awkward phrasing such as 'install new ideas' and missing articles like 'a presentation'. Also, 'classmate' should be plural if more than one. Use linking words to connect ideas better.

例: I usually spend a lot of time studying in the library to meet my deadlines. In addition, I often book a room for group discussions with my classmates, where we share new ideas and prepare presentations for our projects.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains errors. 'My modern workplace' seems incorrect in this context, and 'recommit books' is not appropriate; you likely meant 'return books'. Also, 'She' is unclear who it refers to. Try to clarify and use correct vocabulary and grammar.

例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because my mother's workplace was nearby. She usually took me there so I could study or return books. I really enjoyed spending time in the library because it was quiet and comfortable for learning.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Also, clarify 'locate' and use correct plural forms. Try to give a clear, coherent response with linking words.

例: In my hometown, children often go to the library because it offers many books, including comic books, and sometimes computers for playing games. Therefore, kids enjoy visiting the library both for fun and to meet their friends.

× I often book a room for group discussion with my classmate where we install new ideas and prepare presentation for our project work.

✓ I often book a room for group discussions with my classmates where we brainstorm new ideas and prepare presentations for our project work.

The nouns 'group discussion', 'classmate', and 'presentation' should be plural to match the context of multiple discussions, classmates, and presentations. Also, 'install' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'brainstorm' or 'discuss'. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper noun usage.

× She usually took me there so I could study or recommit books.

✓ She usually took me there so I could study or return books.

The verb 'recommit' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'return' when referring to giving back books. This correction fixes the verb choice to match the intended meaning.

× So the kids very like going there for fun or to meet friends.

✓ So the kids really like going there for fun or to meet friends.

The phrase 'very like' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'really' to modify 'like'. This correction addresses the incorrect use of adverbs modifying verbs.

× Oh, in my hometown, uh, locate uh often go to the library, uh, because the library has a lot shop, uh has lots of books or comic books or sometime have computer for playing games.

✓ Oh, in my hometown, kids often go to the library because the library has many shops, lots of books or comic books, and sometimes computers for playing games.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun use and missing subjects. 'Locate uh' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error. Replacing it with 'kids' clarifies the subject. Also, 'a lot shop' should be 'many shops', and 'sometime have computer' should be 'sometimes computers'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.