Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and somewhat unclear. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding specific supporting details. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it helps me concentrate better when reading. I usually borrow books that interest me and return them on time. The library offers a comfortable environment where I can choose books at my own pace.

提案: Your answer covers the main points but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words to make your ideas flow better. Also, try to be more specific about what you do and how the environment helps you.

例: In the library, I usually browse for new books that I haven't read before and ask the librarian for recommendations. Then, I read in the cozy reading room, which provides a quiet and comfortable atmosphere that helps me focus.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to use correct tenses and clearer expressions. Also, provide more specific details to enrich your answer and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a kid, I only went to the school library because there was no public library in my village. I started using the library regularly when I was in the fifth grade, and I enjoyed reading many interesting books during my childhood.

提案: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and vocabulary. Also, be more specific and coherent by using linking words to explain your points clearly.

例: Yes, Chinese children enjoy reading books and often visit libraries, especially school libraries. For many of them, libraries are favorite places to read and borrow books for their studies and leisure.

× Yes, I like to go to library because it's helped me to read it properly with concentration and on the other time I also go to library, borrow a book.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the library because it has helped me to read properly with concentration and other times I also go to the library to borrow a book.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'it's helped' should be 'it has helped' for clarity, and 'on the other time' is incorrect; 'other times' is appropriate here.

× Sometimes I go to return a book and I can choose the book according to my choice anytime and I can date and with my comfort.

✓ Sometimes I go to return a book and I can choose a book according to my choice anytime and at my convenience.

The phrase 'go to return a book' needs 'to' before the verb 'return' to indicate purpose. Also, 'the book' should be 'a book' because it refers to any book, not a specific one. 'I can date and with my comfort' is unclear; 'at my convenience' is a better expression.

× I often do many things in the library. Firstly I like to be choosing the books which I haven't and also asked to the librarian recommendations.

✓ I often do many things in the library. Firstly, I like to choose books that I don't have and also ask the librarian for recommendations.

'Be choosing' is incorrect here; simple present 'choose' is appropriate. 'Which I haven't' is incomplete; 'that I don't have' is clearer. 'Asked to the librarian recommendations' should be 'ask the librarian for recommendations' to use correct verb and preposition.

× And after choosing the book I start to read in the reading room and the environment of library is very comfortable and cosy, I can easily read.

✓ After choosing a book, I start to read in the reading room. The environment of the library is very comfortable and cosy, so I can read easily.

'The book' should be 'a book' as it refers to any book chosen. 'Environment of library' requires 'the' before 'library' to specify the place. Also, the sentence is better split for clarity and 'so I can read easily' is more natural.

× That time I went only in the school library.

✓ At that time, I only went to the school library.

The phrase 'went only in the school library' is incorrect; 'went to the school library' is correct. Also, 'At that time' is the proper expression to indicate a past time.

× There was no any Public Library available in my village and I introduced a library when I was in 5th class.

✓ There was no public library available in my village and I was introduced to a library when I was in 5th grade.

'No any' is incorrect; 'no' alone suffices. 'Public Library' should not be capitalized unless it's a proper noun. 'I introduced a library' is incorrect; it should be 'I was introduced to a library'. Also, '5th class' is better expressed as '5th grade' in Canadian English.

× And I like to read many good books later to childhood.

✓ And I liked to read many good books later in my childhood.

'Like' should be past tense 'liked' to match past context. 'Later to childhood' is incorrect; 'later in my childhood' is the correct expression.

× Yes, Chinese children very like to read the books and occasionally visit the library to boring the books and sometimes in the school.

✓ Yes, Chinese children really like to read books and occasionally visit the library to borrow books, sometimes at school.

'Very like' is incorrect; 'really like' is appropriate. 'The books' should be 'books' as it refers generally. 'Boring the books' is a misuse; the correct verb is 'borrow'. 'Sometimes in the school' should be 'sometimes at school'.

× Libraries also become their favorite place for the reading.

✓ Libraries have also become their favourite place for reading.

'Become' should be 'have become' to indicate present perfect tense. 'For the reading' is incorrect; 'for reading' is correct. Also, 'favourite' is the Canadian spelling.