Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear, direct response with correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, explain why you prefer manga and clarify what 'Lenovo' refers to, or correct it if it's a mistake.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I prefer reading manga, which I find more entertaining. Also, I enjoy stories that are more engaging, so I usually choose those over traditional books.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

例: I usually don't go to the library because I don't find it enjoyable. After class, my friends and I prefer to relax instead of studying there.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use past tense when talking about the past and structure your sentences clearly. Provide a direct answer followed by reasons with linking words.

例: When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because I didn't find it enjoyable. After class, my friends and I preferred to relax and spend time together elsewhere.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express uncertainty clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, use correct verb forms and plural nouns.

例: I'm not sure because I have lived in Vietnam all my life and haven't spent much time with Chinese children. However, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library because they enjoy learning and reading books.

× I don't like to read book.

✓ I don't like to read books.

The noun 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to books in general, not a single book. In English, when talking about things in general, countable nouns are usually plural.

× I really like to read manga or Lenovo because it's more fun and if you talk a story, it's very interesting.

✓ I really like to read manga or novels because they're more fun and if you talk about a story, it's very interesting.

The word 'Lenovo' is incorrect here; it should be 'novels' (plural) as it refers to books. Also, 'it's' should be 'they're' to agree with the plural subject 'manga or novels'. Additionally, 'talk a story' is incorrect; it should be 'talk about a story'.

× No, I don't go to library because a library don't make me fun.

✓ No, I don't go to the library because the library doesn't make me happy.

The phrase 'a library don't make me fun' is incorrect. 'Library' is a singular noun and requires 'doesn't' for negation. Also, 'make me fun' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make me happy' or 'I don't enjoy it'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'.

× And I and my friend don't like go to library because after the class we need to relax, so we don't often go to library.

✓ And my friend and I don't like to go to the library because after class we need to relax, so we don't often go to the library.

The phrase 'I and my friend' is better as 'my friend and I' for natural English order. 'Don't like go' should be 'don't like to go'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library'. Also, 'after the class' is better as 'after class' in this context.

× I am the kid and I just don't go to the library because I doesn't find the library enjoyable and after class I in my friend's prefer to relax so we spend time.

✓ I am a kid and I just don't go to the library because I don't find the library enjoyable and after class I prefer to relax at my friend's place, so we spend time together.

'I am the kid' should be 'I am a kid' because it refers to any kid, not a specific one. 'I doesn't find' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't find' for first person singular. 'I in my friend's prefer' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer to relax at my friend's place'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I have lived in Vietnam of my life so and I don't have much time in which Chinese children.

✓ I have lived in Vietnam all my life, so I don't know much about Chinese children.

The phrase 'in Vietnam of my life' is incorrect; it should be 'in Vietnam all my life'. 'I don't have much time in which Chinese children' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'I don't know much about Chinese children'. The prepositions and sentence structure are corrected for clarity.

× However, I think many Chinese kids go to the library regularly because they like learning and read book.

✓ However, I think many Chinese kids go to the library regularly because they like learning and reading books.

The phrase 'read book' should be 'reading books' to match the plural form and the gerund form after 'like'. 'Like learning and reading books' is the correct parallel structure.